Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The presented multi-line graph depicts the information of the various activities such as Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020. The data are given as percentages.
Overall, it can be seen that in the activity of the film club held the highest number of participants. While the least proportion of people took a part in amateur dramatics activity.
To begin with, in the year 2000 approximately 65% of individuals took a part in film club activity. After one decade it slightly decreased at 60% and then again mildly went up around 65% in the year 2020. Moreover, under the martial arts activity around 37% of people participated during the year 2000. After that, the proportion fluctuated during the end of the year 2000. It was about 36%. Which was the same number of the share recorded in martial arts activity.
Furthermore, in the year 2000 around 26% of citizens took participate in amateur dramatics. It slightly rose at 27% in 2005 and after that sharply decreased about 5% in 2020. It was the least interested area of activity by the people of Melbourne.
Moving towards rest of the information, during the year 2000 approximately 15% and 0% proportion of participants recorded in table tennis and musical performances respectively. Then after, in the year 2010 the data were changed in both activities and seen mild hike in number of participants. It was around 20% and 10% consecutively. Afterwards, it seen drastic change during the year 2020. The proportion of table tennis participants rapidly increased above 50%. While under the musical performances number of participants share of activity near by 20%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully covers all the main activities presented in the graph, including the Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances. An overview is provided right at the beginning, noting that the film club held the highest number of participants while amateur dramatics had the least. Key trends and comparisons are highlighted across the 2000 to 2020 timeframe, such as the dramatic rise in table tennis participation. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific data points, for instance claiming that martial arts in 2000 was 37% and then referencing 36% without a clear distinction, and describing the drop in amateur dramatics as 'about 5%' rather than dropping TO 5%. Nevertheless, the overall requirements of summarizing the main features and making comparisons are met, placing this response at Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overall summary, and subsequent body paragraphs detailing specific activities. Cohesive devices are employed to guide the reader through the data, using phrases like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Moving towards rest of the information'. However, some cohesive links and referencing are somewhat mechanical or awkward, such as 'Then after' and 'Which was the same number of the share recorded', which slightly disrupts the natural flow. Paragraphing is used adequately to structure the response, ensuring a coherent overall arrangement that earns a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'drastic change', and 'participants'. There are, however, several lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, including 'took a part' instead of 'took part', 'took participate', 'seen mild hike', and 'least interested area of activity'. Despite these vocabulary errors and word-choice inaccuracies, communication is not impeded, and the range is sufficient to meet the Band 6.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Examples of errors include missing articles ('in the activity of the film club'), incorrect prepositional usage ('decreased at 60%', 'decreased about 5%'), and fragmented structures ('Which was the same number of the share recorded in martial arts activity'). Verb tense and voice issues also appear, such as 'proportion of participants recorded' instead of 'were recorded'. While these errors in grammar and punctuation are noticeable, they rarely impede overall communication, supporting a Band 5.5 score.
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