Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the given line chart illustrates the information about the numbers of participants engage in numerous activities ai social centre in Melbourne, Australia during the period from 2000 to 2020.
overall, the highest participants involved in Film club as comapred to other activities. while, in case of Amateur dramatics, there were least participants at end of 2020.
It can be vividly seen that the musical performance, the number of participants started playing in 2005, whereas all other activities had already begin in 2000. in 2010, the figure stood at 10 . however, it increased to 15 in 2015. on the other side, in terms of table tennis the total participants take part in 2005 and 2005 was 15 and 20 respectively. Further, these numbers remained constant till 2010, after that this figure dramatic incline and reached at 35 in 2015, finallly in 2020, approximately 55 individuals engage in this activity.
Moving towards the rest of the information, in the martial arts, in 2000, it was starred with 35 participants, then this figure showed slight decline to 30 in 2005 and after that from the period between 2010 to 2020 this exhibited a fluctuations and remained at below 40. Moreover, the Amateur dramatics begin with 25 and increased by 5 in 2005, finally in 2010 to 2020, it depicts rapid decline and stood at 5 in the last year.the film club remained at the highest participants, as it generally started with 65 in 2000 and decline by 5 in 2010 and reamined above from 65.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all the main features of the chart across the given period, identifying key trends such as the popularity of the Film club and the rise in table tennis participants. However, the summary lacks sufficient data comparisons between categories, and some specific figures contain inaccuracies compared to the visual prompt (e.g., describing musical performance numbers incorrectly). The overview provided in the second paragraph captures the highest and lowest points broadly, but lacks precision. While the task is adequately addressed to satisfy a Band 5.5 to 6.0 level, the lack of well-synthesized comparisons prevents it from achieving a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into logical paragraphs, starting with an introduction, an overview, and subsequent body paragraphs detailing different activities. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. The student relies on basic transitional phrases like 'Moving towards the rest of the information' and 'on the other side'. Additionally, referencing and pronoun use are sometimes unclear. Sentences within paragraphs can feel disjointed due to poor punctuation and abrupt shifts between different data points without smooth logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases related to trends, such as 'dramatic incline', 'fluctuations', and 'rapid decline'. However, there are numerous inappropriate word choices and spelling/morphological errors, such as 'engage' instead of 'engaged', 'comapred', 'finallly', and 'starred' instead of 'started'. These vocabulary errors and awkward collocations occasionally hinder precise communication, placing the response firmly in the Band 5 to 6 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak throughout. There is a complete lack of capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns (e.g., 'the given line chart', 'overall', 'film club'), along with severe run-on sentences and comma splices (e.g., 'Further, these numbers remained constant till 2010, after that this figure dramatic incline...'). Grammatical inaccuracies such as missing verbs ('figure dramatic incline' instead of 'figure experienced a dramatic incline') and incorrect prepositional use ('engage in this activity' where past tense is needed) create frequent obstacles for the reader.
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