Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrates the numbers of members doing distinct activities at a social centre in a city of Australia, Melbourne in two decades.
Overall, there are five different activities. Film club was at the top while Amateur dramatics was at the bottom when they ended off. Moreover, the amateur dramatics was the second most participated activity with aroundly 53 people .
Initially, the Film club was at on top in 2000
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 71 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, and the information is severely under-developed. While the student attempts to introduce the graph and note a couple of general trends (e.g., mentioning 'Film club' and 'Amateur dramatics'), the summary is extremely truncated and cuts off mid-sentence ('Initially, the Film club was at on top in 2000'). Because of the severe under-length and lack of a complete overview and detailed comparisons across the 20-year period, this meets the criteria for Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too brief to demonstrate full paragraphing or a coherent overall progression, as it breaks off abruptly after three short sentences. However, simple cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'Moreover' are used to link initial ideas. Referencing is attempted, but the abrupt ending prevents any sustained logical structure. The overall arrangement is minimal, aligning with the descriptors for Band 4.0, as information and ideas cannot be fully developed or coherently arranged in such a short fragment.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses basic and repetitive vocabulary suitable for the task, such as 'numbers', 'activities', and 'social centre'. There are awkward word choices and unnatural collocations, such as 'doing distinct activities', 'most participated activity', and the invented lexical item 'aroundly'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very basic concepts, but errors in word formation and collocation are noticeable, supporting a Band 5.0 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences and one attempted complex structure that remains unfinished ('Initially, the Film club was at on top in 2000'). There are grammatical and prepositional errors, such as 'at on top' and 'doing distinct activities at a social centre... in Melbourne in two decades'. Because the text is incomplete and error frequency is high relative to the small amount of output, it sits at Band 4.0.
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