Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line illustrates the number of participants in five different activities-film club,martial arts,amateur dramatics,table tennis and musical performances-between 2000 and 2020.
Overall,the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period,despite a slight decline initialy.Table tennis experienced the most popular activity by 2020.In constract,participation in amateur daramatics declined substantially,while musical performances rose steadily from zero.
In 2000,approximately 64 participants attend the film club,making it for the most popular activity.This figure is fell gradually to around 59 in 2010,before recovering to 65 by 2020.Martial arts,meanwhile,started at about 36 participants and falucated moderately,falling to 31 in 2005,then rsisng to 37 in 2010.It subsequently declined sightly before ending at approximately 35 participants.
Table tennis followed a very different patterns.Starting at only 16 participants in 2000,its numbers increased to 20 in 2005 and remained almost unchanged in 2010.However,partcipation then surged to around 35 in 2015 and reached approximately 52 by 2020.
Amateur dramatics initially attracted about 26 participants,rising marginally to 27 in 2005.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task well by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. The overview accurately highlights the film club as the most popular throughout and notes the contrasting trajectories of table tennis and amateur dramatics. Key features and data points are selected and reported, such as the film club starting at approximately 64 and table tennis surging to around 52 by 2020. However, the response trails off abruptly at the end, leaving out the data for musical performances and concluding mid-sentence with 'Amateur dramatics initially attracted about 26 participants, rising marginally to 27 in 2005.' This incomplete final paragraph represents a noticeable omission of required information from the graph. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed in terms of completeness, justifying a score of 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response has a clear overall arrangement and follows a logical structure, beginning with an introduction, moving to an overview, and then detailing specific activities in separate paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall', 'In constract', and 'meanwhile'. However, paragraphing is somewhat disrupted by the incomplete concluding sentence, and mechanical errors in spacing and punctuation (e.g., missing spaces after commas in 'Overall,the film club' and typographical errors like 'constract' and 'daramatics') slightly distract from the flow. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of a proper conclusion due to the abrupt cutoff limits the overall progression and cohesion of the text, supporting a band score of 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully employing functional reporting terms such as 'participants', 'decline substantially', 'rose steadily', and 'surged'. Less common items are attempted with varying success. There are several spelling and typographical errors, including 'initialy', 'constract', 'daramatics', 'attend' (instead of attended), 'falucated' (fluctuated), 'rsisng', and 'partcipation'. Furthermore, there are collocation and word choice inaccuracies, such as 'Table tennis experienced the most popular activity by 2020', where 'experienced' is misused. Despite these errors, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning without severely impeding communication, fitting the criteria for a band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, incorporating relative clauses and introductory prepositional phrases like 'In 2000, approximately 64 participants attend the film club'. There are numerous grammatical and mechanical errors throughout the text, such as tense inconsistency ('attend' instead of attended, 'is fell' instead of fell), spelling mistakes, and spacing issues after punctuation marks. Complex structures often contain errors, such as 'This figure is fell gradually'. Although these errors are frequent, they rarely obscure the intended meaning entirely. The control of grammar and punctuation is patchy, pointing directly to a band 5.5 score.
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