Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph given illustrates information on the numbers of participants from the period 2000 to 2020 for different tasks at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia.
The graphs illustrates the information on five different activities Film club,Martial arts,Amateur dramatics,Table tennuis and Musical performances.Provided number of participants from 2000 to 2020.
The Flim club intially in year 2000 had 65 participants but number of participants are fluctuated.In 2020 it had its peak.Secondly,Amateur dramatics had around 26 participants but as time passes its has fallen dratiscally to less than 10 participants.Martial arts participants had Rise and fall.
Coming to Table tennis its had huge increase in number of participants as time passes this shows most of the participants liked this activity.Started with around 15 and ended with 55 participants.Similarly, Musical performances activity also has drastically increased the number of participants but Musical performances started from the year 2005.
In conclusion,The graph given illustrates information on the numbers of participants from the period 2000 to 2020 for different tasks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying several activities such as the Film club, Amateur dramatics, and Table tennis, and includes some initial and final figures (e.g., 'Started with around 15 and ended with 55 participants'). However, there are significant weaknesses in overview and data selection. The introduction is repetitive, with the first two paragraphs largely restating the same information, and the essay lacks a clear, cohesive overall summary of the main trends. Additionally, some data points are vague or lack precision, and the final concluding paragraph simply repeats the introduction rather than synthesizing the main trends. Therefore, the response fulfills the basic requirements but lacks full development and organisation of ideas, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The organisation of the essay is heavily fragmented. The text is broken into very short, single-sentence paragraphs that fail to develop unified themes or logical progression. For example, paragraphs two and three isolate individual details without smooth transitions or a clear structural flow ('Coming to Table tennis its had huge increase...'). Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as 'Secondly' used out of sequence or abrupt shifts between sentences. Paragraphing is not used effectively to structure the response, and referencing is sometimes unclear, leading to a disjointed reading experience that aligns closely with Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors; a score of 5.0 is awarded.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited and repetitive range of vocabulary. Phrases like 'illustrates information on the numbers of participants' and 'different activities' are repeated multiple times throughout the response. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'tennuis' for tennis, 'intially' for initially, 'dratiscally' for drastically, and 'Flim' for Film. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are hindered by poor control over spelling and collocation (e.g., 'participants had Rise and fall'). While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic topic references, the frequency of errors places this firmly in the Band 5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical range is quite limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors and awkward phrasing. Examples include 'The graphs illustrates the information', 'its had huge increase', and 'Musical performances activity also has drastically increased the number of participants but Musical performances started from the year 2005.' There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graphs illustrates', 'its had'), missing articles, and awkward prepositional use. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are frequently faulty. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 criteria.
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