Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph compare the numbers of participants for different activities at a social centre in Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, over the years the participants are increasing except for amateur dramatics. While for table tennis activity there was a sudden rise in figures. Moreover, activity like film club remain a leading one.
To begin with Film club, in 2000 there where around 65 members and continuously maintaining its figures. While for the martial arts it start with 35 players in 2000, slight drop in 2005 but after that it rise and in 2020 it was marked with around 38 participants. Moreover, for amateur dramatics it begin with 37 members and after 2010 it significantly drop in members and at end of the year it marked with only 8 players which was lowest among all.
For table tennis, it start with only 15 participants in 2000 and gradually climb in numbers and after 2010 there was a notable rise in figure and marked as second highest activity of Melbourne at 55 members in 2020. Additionally for musical activity it starts lately in 2005 and reached at roughly 18 participant in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully identifies the main features and trends of the provided graph, covering all five activities over the twenty-year period. An overview is provided, highlighting the general upward trends and the exception of amateur dramatics, alongside the dominance of the film club and the dramatic rise in table tennis. However, there are minor inaccuracies in the reporting of specific data points; for instance, amateur dramatics started around 26 in 2000 rather than 37, and musical performances actually started in 2010 rather than 2005. Despite these factual slips, the core trends and comparisons are adequately presented, fulfilling the basic requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is structured into four distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the specific categories. Ideas are generally organized logically, and cohesive devices such as 'while', 'moreover', and 'additionally' are utilized to connect contrasting and additional points. However, paragraphing and referencing can feel slightly mechanical, and the transitional flow between sentences occasionally feels abrupt due to grammatical limitations. Overall, the writing maintains a coherent arrangement that allows the reader to follow the progression of information without significant difficulty.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'substantially', 'notable rise', and 'participants'. However, there are several word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'continuous maintaining its figures' and 'musical activity it starts lately'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the lexical range remains somewhat limited and repetitive, preventing the response from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, but lacks the precision and flexibility expected at Band 7.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the graph compare', 'activity like film club remain', 'it start', 'it rise'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('it marked with only 8 players'). While these errors rarely completely impede communication, their frequency means that error-free sentences are in the minority. Punctuation is generally basic but functional.
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