Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph shows information reached of participants for different activities at one public centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, table tennis illustrates the upward trends compared with amateur dramatics followed the opposite pattern. It is also noticeable that martial arts and film club rose slightly.
At the beginning of the period, table tennis stood at around 15 before rising 35 in 2020. Whereas, amateur dramatics shows decrease significantly from 28 to 8 from 2005 to 2020. Musical performances grew up from 11 to 18 from the period of 2005 to 2020.
Turning to film club and matial arts its figure was initially almost unchanged before last year. By the end of the year it has remaind relatively stable
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to cover the main trends in the graph, such as the upward trend in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are several inaccurate data points and omissions. For example, the student states that table tennis started at around 15 and rose to 35 in 2020 (whereas the actual figures are 16 and 54), and incorrectly claims that musical performances grew from 11 in 2005 (the graph shows 0 until 2010). Furthermore, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 121 words, which imposes a strict ceiling on this criterion under official guidelines.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts a basic structure, including an introductory sentence and an overview paragraph. However, the organisation is hindered by very short, choppy paragraphs and poor logical progression. Cohesive devices are minimal or mechanically applied, such as 'Whereas' used inappropriately at the start of a sentence ('Whereas, amateur dramatics shows decrease...'). Referencing is also confusing at times, as seen in the final paragraph ('Turning to film club and matial arts its figure was initially...'). Paragraphing is disjointed and does not effectively guide the reader through the data comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'information reached of participants', 'public centre' instead of social centre, and 'shows decrease significantly'. There are also spelling errors such as 'matial arts' and 'remaind'. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'participants' and 'activities', the limited range and frequent inaccuracies constrain the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or comparative structures are frequently flawed, such as 'table tennis illustrates the upward trends compared with amateur dramatics followed the opposite pattern.' There are notable tense inconsistencies and verb-form errors, including 'it has remaind' and 'rose 35 in 2020' (missing the preposition 'to'). Frequent grammatical errors cause some difficulty for the reader.
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