Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this graph we will see number of participants in one social centre in Melbourne, Australia. In 2000 there are 16 participants in Table tennis. There are 26 participants in Amateur dramatics. There are 64 participants in Film club. There are 36 participants in martial arts. In 2005 there are no participants in musical performane, 20 participants in table tennis, 30 participants in amateur dramatics, 31 participants in martial arts and 61 in film club.In 2010 there are 10 participants in musical performance,20 in table tennis, 20 in amateur dramatics, 40 in martial arts and 60 in film club.In 2015 there are 15 participants in musical performances, 40 in table tennis, 12 in amateur dramatics, 34 participants in martial arts and 66 participants in film club. In 2020 there are 8 amateur dramatics, 16 in musical perormance, 39 in martial arts,58 in table tennis and 70 participants in film club.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the data across the years provided in the graph, but it relies almost entirely on listing individual data points year by year rather than providing a cohesive summary of main trends and comparisons. For example, the student writes 'In 2000 there are 16 participants in Table tennis. There are 26 participants in Amateur dramatics...' without giving a clear overview or grouping data meaningfully. There are also several minor inaccuracies in the numbers reported when compared against the visual data, such as stating there were 61 in film club in 2005 or 8 amateur dramatics in 2020. Because the response fails to adequately report the main features and make meaningful comparisons, it falls into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as a single dense paragraph of continuous text without any structural division or appropriate paragraphing. There is a lack of logical organisation and progression; instead of guiding the reader through overall trends or a chronological overview, the text simply jumps from one raw data point to another. Cohesive devices are severely lacking, with sentences strung together repetitively using basic subject-verb openings like 'There are...' or 'In [year] there are...'. Referencing and logical transition markers are absent, making the progression mechanical and difficult to follow, which corresponds to Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used throughout the response is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted almost exclusively to numbers, years, and the names of the activities provided in the prompt. The student constantly repeats phrases like 'there are participants in' without attempting any lexical variation or paraphrasing of the chart's categories. There is no evidence of less common lexical items, collocation awareness, or functional vocabulary for describing trends (such as 'rose', 'declined', 'fluctuated', or 'significant'). Spelling and word-form errors also appear, such as 'performane' and 'perormance'. This vocabulary range is minimally adequate for basic listing, earning a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures employed are extremely limited and repetitive, consisting almost entirely of simple present tense sentences following the formula 'In [year] there are [number] participants in [activity]'. Furthermore, the student consistently uses the present tense ('there are') to describe historical data from 2000 to 2020, which is grammatically inappropriate for past trends. There is a complete absence of complex sentence forms, relative clauses, or varied subordinate structures. Punctuation errors also occur, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'club.In 2010'). This restricted range and persistent structural inaccuracy place the grammar at Band 4.
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