Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The line graph provides information about the number of people who joined in for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne in Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club remained consistently the most popular activity that attracted people throughout the period, while those who attracted to martial arts activity fluctuated. The number of participants in table tennis and musical performances experienced a consistent rise, whereas those in amateur dramatics declined dramatically, making it the least popular activity by the end of the period.
Visitors of social centre preferred to participate in film club activity over the entire 20-year.In 2000, there was just over 60 individuals in this activity before declining to 60 in 2010, which was followed by gradual recovery to reach around the same number of participants in 2000. The figure for martial arts fluctuated between approximately 40 and around 31 from 2000 to 2015, before levelling out at roughly 35 participant in 2020.
The number of people who attracted to table tennis was about 15 in 2000, before rising to about 20 in 2010, while by 2020, this figure had grown to reach just over 50 individuals. A similar an upward trend was observed with those in musical performances, people started to join this activity just after 2005, there number became 10 in 2010, with mild increasing was noticed afterward to around 20 by 2020. By contrast, amateur dramatics became less popular over the time, this figure was around 25 in 2000 before falling rapidly after 2005, reaching it lowest participant in 2020 at roughly 5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons across the five activities shown in the line graph. An appropriate and clear overview is provided in the second paragraph, highlighting the general trajectory of the categories (e.g., film club remaining the most popular, table tennis and musical performances rising, and amateur dramatics declining). Key data points and figures are accurately referenced throughout the body paragraphs, such as the starting and ending points for table tennis and amateur dramatics. The response is fully developed and well-grounded in the visual data provided, fulfilling the requirements for Task Achievement at a high level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into four paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overarching summary, and two detailed body paragraphs. Information and ideas are logically sequenced with clear progression throughout the response. Cohesive devices are used adequately and appropriately, such as 'Overall', 'while', 'whereas', and 'By contrast'. Paragraphing is handled well, with each paragraph serving a distinct function in structuring the response. Although occasional referencing could be slightly smoother, the overall logical flow and cohesion support clear communication.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate and generally appropriate range of vocabulary for the task. Less common lexical items and phrases are attempted, such as 'consistently', 'fluctuated', 'declined dramatically', and 'gradual recovery'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing, such as 'those who attracted to' instead of 'those attracted to', and 'there number became' instead of 'their number reached'. Despite these occasional lexical errors, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning without impeding communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over clause structures through the use of subordinate clauses and contrasting conjunctions. However, grammatical errors appear regularly, particularly with passive voice constructions ('those who attracted to' instead of 'those who were attracted to'), article usage ('the social centre'), and pronoun/possessive confusion ('there number' instead of 'their number', and 'it lowest participant' instead of 'its lowest number of participants'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they prevent the text from achieving a higher band score due to their frequency.
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