Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates that many people take place in five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the time period of ten years from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is evident that a huge number of people were engage at flim club with slight fluctuation at the med year. However, musical performances were the least among all other four activities over the 20 year period. While, table tenmies were the most rose activety that can be seen at high jumped.

In 2000, flim club were at at the top with 65 members and it slightly drop to 60 in 2010. Nevertheless, it was the most favorable activity at all the time among most of the members. Martial art were used as activity by 35 member in 2000 that it contiune fluctuate and remain stable in 2020 with same number of members.

Table tannis were played by 25 people in 2000 and drop to 20 people after ten years and it overlap with Amateur dramatics. Subsiquentely, it showed a massive reduction of people interest and goes nearly 5 persns in 2020. At the end, musical performances get intrersted at 2005 and rose among 10 person in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover all parts of the task by reporting on the different activities and mentioning trends over the 20-year period. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that the film club was at '65 members' in 2000 (actual is around 64), but more importantly, confuses the trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics in the second body paragraph, mixing up figures and labels ('Table tannis were played by 25 people... drop to 20 people... and it overlap with Amateur dramatics'). The overview is somewhat weak, as it contains inaccurate interpretations, such as stating musical performances were the lowest over the entire 20-year period when they actually started at zero in 2000 and 2005. Consequently, the response achieves a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is divided into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by inaccurate data reporting and confusing transitions. Cohesive devices are used, but often inappropriately or mechanically (e.g., 'Nevertheless, it was the most favorable activity at all the time', 'Subsiquentely, it showed a massive reduction'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow which activity is being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. Overall, this performance corresponds to a Band 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a limited range of vocabulary with frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation. Examples of non-standard usage and spelling mistakes include 'take place' instead of 'take part', 'engage at flim club' (engaged in the film club), 'med year' (mid-year), 'most rose activety', 'flim club', 'Martial art', 'Table tannis', 'Subsiquentely', and 'persns'. While there is an attempt to use less common vocabulary like 'fluctuation' and 'reduction', the high density of lexical errors impedes clarity and places strain on the reader. This fits the Band 5.0 descriptor profile.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is very low throughout the response. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'flim club were at', 'Martial art were used', 'musical performances get intrersted'), tense consistency, and prepositions. Many complex structures are faulty or awkward (e.g., 'While, table tenmies were the most rose activety that can be seen at high jumped'). Punctuation is also erratic. These persistent errors cause frequent difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.

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