Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows data on the numbers of members for various actions at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia since 2000 to 2020.
Overall,there are five clubs innsocial centre of Melbourne such as- film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performaces.However, the highest participants were obsserved in film club and lowest were in amateur dramatics in 2020.
In 2000, film club had largest populations which was around 65 in number and there was no members in musical performances in this year. Additionally, Table tennis had 15 members followed by amateur and martial arts which increased 2 fold as 25 and 35 resspectively. All the club participants showed slow decrease in 2005 except table tennis which increased 2 members. Musical performances and table tennis presented increasing trend through out the period which were which were around12and 52 in 2020 but it could not pass the number of membersof film club which were 65 in 2020 and also remained highest all years than other clubs. However, Amateur dramatics showed dreasing trend all the years and in 2020 it's members were near about five.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The candidate manages to cover the main features and trends of the graph, identifying the highest and lowest points as well as general trajectories over the 20-year period. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific figures, such as stating table tennis had 15 members in 2000 when the chart shows 16, and claiming martial arts increased two-fold to 35 in 2000. Additionally, some statements regarding the overall trends are slightly confused or imprecise. The overview identifies the main trends adequately, but data selection and precision lack consistency. Therefore, this performance meets the criteria for Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph, showing a basic structure. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with the overview crammed together with body details in an awkward manner. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or misused, as seen in awkward transitions like 'Additionally' and 'However'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as 'which were which were around12and 52 in 2020'. The logical progression is somewhat disjointed, making the flow difficult to follow at times. This warrants a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate basic information about the graph, such as 'increasing trend', 'decreasing trend', and names of activities. However, there are frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation, including 'members for various actions', 'innsocial centre', 'performaces', 'obsserved', and 'dreasing'. Less common lexical items are attempted but usually result in unnatural phrasing or mistakes. The range of vocabulary is rather limited and repetitive. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense, prepositions, and clause structures, such as 'since 2000 to 2020', 'which increased 2 fold as 25 and 35 resspectively', and repeated words ('which were which were'). Punctuation and spacing are also faulty throughout the text. While meaning can generally be extracted, the frequency of grammatical errors causes noticeable strain for the reader. This performance aligns with a Band 5.0.
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