Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the details of the number of competitors for diiferent activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia during the period of year 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the line graph shows that there are five activities in which the film club maintained there position on the highest point of graph as compared to others while musical performances was at the lowest level of graph.

It is immensely clear that, film club maintained the highest position in the graph. In year 2000, film club had around 65 participants which decreased in 2010 which was around 60 but after a time it increasred upto 70 participants in year 2020. Musical performances had lower amount of participants which was 0 in year 2005 but it increased upto 15 participants in year 2020.

In year 2000, table tennis had around 15 participants whch inc

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the film club as the highest and musical performances as the lowest. However, the report is incomplete as it cuts off abruptly mid-sentence at the end. Additionally, there are some minor inaccuracies in reporting the data, such as stating the film club reached 70 in 2020 when the graph shows approximately 66, and claiming it reached 65 in 2000 when the graph shows around 64. Furthermore, because the response falls short of the 150-word minimum, a penalty is applied to Task Achievement, resulting in a band score of 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response attempts a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the abrupt cut-off in the final sentence severely disrupts the overall progression and cohesion. Cohesive devices are used simply (e.g., 'Overall', 'In year 2000', 'Musical performances had lower amount'), but paragraphing is poorly handled due to the incomplete nature of the response. Referencing is mostly clear, but the lack of a concluding sentence and the broken ending prevent the text from achieving a higher band. Band 5.0 is awarded for basic organizational attempts.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting words related to data description such as 'illustrates', 'maintain', 'increased', and 'participants'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('diiferent' instead of different, 'increasred' instead of increased, 'whch' instead of which) and some awkward phrasing like 'lower amount of participants' instead of 'lower number of participants'. Less common lexical items are attempted with occasional inaccuracies in word choice. Band 6.0 reflects a vocabulary that is adequate for the task despite mechanical errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'The line graph illustrates the details of the number of competitors for different activities...'. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('film club maintained there position' instead of 'their position') and spelling mistakes that affect individual words. The incomplete final sentence ('whch inc') demonstrates a breakdown in sentence structure. However, many sentences are grammatically intelligible, supporting a band score of 5.5.

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