Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants who took part in five different activities at a leisure centre between 2000 and 2020.overall, Flim club have the highest number of participants from 2000 to 2020 and the musical performances have the least number of participants from 2000 to 2020.

Firstly, we discuss about the Flim club. Flim club have around 63 number of participants that took place in Melbourne for social centre.It started from 2000 to 2020 and its the highest number of participants at the given period.Secondly the Martial arts begin at 37 number of participants in 2000 and it remain same after 20 years at 2020.Amateur dramatics started from the 27 number of participants in 2000 and its goes down and reached at around 6 number of participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at only 132 words, which directly impacts task achievement. Furthermore, the report is incomplete as it fails to cover all categories, omitting any mention of table tennis, which underwent a dramatic surge over the period. While the student correctly identifies the film club as the highest and musical performances as the lowest overall, the data points provided contain inaccuracies, such as stating the film club had 'around 63 number of participants' when it was 64, and spelling errors in key terms like 'Flim club'. Ideas are inadequately developed, leading to a Band 5 performance for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The organisation of the response shows a basic attempt to structure an overview and body paragraphs, utilising transitional markers such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly'. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. The paragraphing is disrupted by abrupt and broken sentences, such as starting a new sentence mid-thought ('It started from 2000 to 2020...'). Referencing is also weak, with unclear pronoun usage and repetitive sentence structures that hinder logical progression. Overall, the structural framework is present but poorly executed, aligning with a Band 5 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily constrained by spelling and word-choice errors. The most notable issue is the persistent misspelling of 'Film club' as 'Flim club'. The student relies on rudimentary phrasing such as 'have the highest number of participants' and 'goes down and reached at around 6 number of participants'. There is a lack of flexibility and precision, and while communication is not entirely impeded, the limited and repetitive range restricts the score to a Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent basic errors. There are notable subject-verb agreement and tense errors, such as 'Flim club have' instead of 'has', and mixing present and past tenses inappropriately ('It started from 2000 to 2020 and its the highest number'). Punctuation is also problematic, including run-on sentences and missing apostrophes (e.g., 'its' instead of 'it's'). Because complex structures are virtually absent and errors are frequent, a Band 5 is appropriate.

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