Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants who took part in five different activities at a leisure centre between 2000 and 2020.overall, Flim club have the highest number of participants from 2000 to 2020 and the musical performances have the least number of participants from 2000 to 2020.
Firstly, we discuss about the Flim club. Flim club have around 63 number of participants that took place in Melbourne for social centre.It started from 2000 to 2020 and its the highest number of participants at the given period.Secondly the Martial arts begin at 37 number of participants in 2000 and it remain same after 20 years at 2020.Amateur dramatics started from the 27 number of participants in 2000 and its goes down and reached at around 6 number of participants in 2020.
However,Table tennis started from the 18 participants in 2000 and its went up very highly in next some years and arrived at 53 participants in 2020 and its the great change in table tennis.At last we discuss about the musical performances because it have the least number of participants in the given periods is has 0 participants in 2000 and its improvement started from the 2005. After some year it made great change in next some years and get 13 participants from 2000 to 2020.
In conclusion,This line graph have total 5 number of participants that took place in Melbourne for social center and the highest one is Flim club and least one is musical performances.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting information on the five activities shown in the line graph. An overview is provided, noting the highest (Film club) and lowest (musical performances) categories. However, the response suffers from several issues regarding Task Achievement. The data reporting contains numerous inaccuracies and vague approximations (e.g., stating Film club has around 63, or missing key comparative milestones). Additionally, the overview is embedded directly into the introductory sentence with formatting issues (lowercase 'overall', 'Flim club'). While key trends like Table tennis increasing and Amateur dramatics decreasing are noted, the overall development of ideas is limited and under-developed, aligning best with a Band 5 score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some basic attempts at organization through paragraphing and sequential markers like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion'. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, run-on sentences, and conversational filler such as 'At last we discuss about the musical performances'. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with body paragraphs crammed with multiple disparate points rather than organized logically by trends or categories. Furthermore, referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'its improvement started from the 2005'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately, which heavily limits the overall coherence of the response, justifying a Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a very limited and repetitive range of vocabulary, heavily relying on basic verbs and nouns (e.g., 'started', 'went up', 'number of participants'). There are multiple spelling errors and typos, most notably the recurring misspelling of 'Film' as 'Flim', as well as word-choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'took place in Melbourne for social centre', 'its the great change in table tennis'). Less common vocabulary is either absent or used inaccurately. While communication is not entirely impeded, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, meeting the criteria for a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex or compound sentences are frequently faulty, characterized by missing articles, incorrect prepositions, subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'Flim club have', 'musical performances... is has'), and run-on sentences joined by commas instead of proper conjunctions or full stops. Punctuation and capitalization are weak throughout the text (e.g., missing spaces after periods like 'social centre.It started'). Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation cause noticeable difficulty for the reader at times, placing this response firmly in the Band 5 category.
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