Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graph illustrates the information about the number of participants for performing different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Austraila for the period 2000 to 2020.

The number of participants in film club found higher approximately 65 in the year 2000 while in 2005 its number fall down to nill. The martial arts and table tennis meet at same point in the year of 2010 remains constant but later on in 2015 dimensions changes and martial arts crossed the range of participants and reached its peak above 50. The number of participants in Amateur dramatics at first starts from 15 rises and meet at one point in 2010, gradually it starts to decline in 2020. The number of participants involve in musical performances just intiated in the year of 2005 after few years it starts to rise and remain stable in 2020 Overall, the number of participants gets more participation in filmclub as comapred to other activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to report the main features of the graph, identifying several activities such as the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in reading the data from the graph. For instance, the student states that the film club fell down to 'nill' in 2005 (whereas it remained around 62) and describes musical performances starting in 2005 (they actually started around 2010 at 12). Furthermore, the overview provided at the end is very brief and contains grammatical confusions. The response does address the prompt generally, but the numerous misreadings of the chart pull the task response down to a Band 5.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, being presented as one large, messy block of text following the introduction. Cohesive devices are minimal or mechanically applied (e.g., 'while in 2005', 'later on in 2015', 'Overall'), and referencing is occasionally confusing. There is no clear logical progression guiding the reader through the data, as sentences tend to jump randomly between different activities and years. This places the essay firmly at Band 5.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary, relying heavily on basic terms like 'number of participants', 'activities', and 'rises'/'fall down'. There are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'Austraila' (Australia), 'nill' (nil), 'intiated' (initiated), and 'filmclub' (film club). Collocations and lexical control are weak throughout, with awkward phrasing like 'gets more participation'. This meets the criteria for Band 5.0, where vocabulary is limited and noticeable errors occur.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text contains a heavy density of grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('The number of participants in film club found higher'), missing prepositions ('involve in'), and run-on sentences lacking appropriate punctuation. Complex structures are attempted but are frequently faulty or confusing. While the general meaning of some sentences can be understood, the frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 5.0 descriptors.

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