Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates data on the number of attendees for several activities at social centre of Australia, Melbourne for 2 decades.
Overall, among those activities film club stood at top while this trend was mirroring the second position
by table tennis. By contrast, amateur dramatics as activities dropped in the same period and other remaining activities shows slightly increased participants.
Film club was the most popular activities among those all. Well over 60 people choosed film club instead of others in 2000 that grew by 5 between 2020. However, around 28 individuals prefer amateur dramatics which drastically decreased by over 15 attendees. Musical performances as fun activity had choosen from 2005 and started to climb steadily.
The second famous game was table tennis. Incredibly interest had increased in tennis stood at over 50 which belongs to under 20 in the beginning year. While number of peoples fluctuated in martial arts. Hence, tennis and film club recorded the popularity while dramatics cannot get the follopwing trend.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, including the overall trends and comparisons between activities such as the film club and table tennis. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and vague statements regarding the data. For instance, stating that table tennis mirrored the film club is misleading, as table tennis actually experienced a dramatic upward trend from 16 to 54 participants, whereas the film club remained relatively stable around 60-66. Furthermore, some data points are imprecise or confusingly phrased, such as the claim that the film club grew 'by 5 between 2020' and the reference to musical performances starting in 2005 when the data shows 0 until 2010. While the overview is partially present, the lack of precision and some misreadings place this at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic visual structure, but the internal cohesion and logical progression are frequently disrupted. Sentences often feel disjointed, and transitional phrases are either misused or absent (e.g., 'while this trend was mirroring the second position by table tennis'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of comparisons. Paragraphing is attempted, but grouping ideas related to specific activities or trends is not executed logically. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately, resulting in a response that fits the Band 5 descriptor where organisation is evident but overall progression lacks clarity.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and frequently repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'activities', 'people', and 'popular', and attempts less common words result in awkward collocations or incorrect word forms, such as 'choosed' instead of 'chose', 'peoples', and 'follopwing trend'. Phrases like 'Incredibly interest had increased' demonstrate noticeable lexical and grammatical errors that cause some difficulty for the reader. While the topic-specific vocabulary is minimally adequate to discuss the chart, the frequent word-choice errors and lack of precision restrict the lexical score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are numerous grammar and tense errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('other remaining activities shows'), incorrect verb forms ('choosed', 'had choosen'), and preposition errors ('between 2020' instead of 'by 2020'). Punctuation is basic, and sentence boundaries are sometimes blurred. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band, aligning well with the Band 5 descriptors.
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