Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph presents the information about number of participants on different internet communities in Melbourne and Austrlia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall the data shows different social centres. For example film club, martial arts and musical performances. The higest number of perentages is film club and the fallest proportion is musical performances which is steadily increased.

The table tennis number of participants in 2000 is between in the numbers of 10 and 20 and they going straight and then in 2010 they pumped from number of 15 to almost 50 its a such number of bullish. After that the film club is the rose number of participants which number is 70 and they moving straight forward.

The martial arts is the third biggest social centre in Australia. After that amateur dramatics is the lowest internet centre when the starting number from 25 and in 2005 they fell in 2010 its participants is 20 and in the end 2020 its members is around 5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the graph, but it contains significant inaccuracies regarding the task data and subject matter (mistaking social centre activities for internet communities). The student identifies some trends, such as the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics, but misinterprets key figures and proportions (e.g., calling film club a percentage and stating musical performances steadily increased when it started at zero). Furthermore, the overview is confused and lacks a clear summary of the main overall trends. Therefore, the task is only partially addressed, corresponding to a Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The relationships between sentences are often unclear, and cohesive devices are misused or absent, resulting in a disjointed flow. For instance, transitional phrases like 'After that' are overused awkwardly, and referencing is frequently confusing (e.g., 'they going straight'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal coherence within the paragraphs is lacking. This fits the Band 5 descriptor, where some organization is present, but overall progression is missing and cohesion is inadequate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and often strained or inaccurate in context, such as referring to social centre activities as 'internet communities' and using strange collocations like 'such number of bullish'. There are noticeable errors in word choice (e.g., 'higest', 'perentages', 'fallest', 'rose number') which cause confusion for the reader. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a precise academic summary, placing it firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the attempt to use descriptive terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical accuracy is very low. There are frequent, heavy errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'the table tennis number of participants in 2000 is between in the numbers', 'in 2005 they fell in 2010 its participants is 20'). Sentence structures are frequently broken or malformed, causing significant difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptor, as errors are frequent and often distort meaning.

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