Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph illustrate that the number of participation for different activities at ane social centre in Australia and Melcourne between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club has the highest number of participation between two dacades. In contrast, Musicle performance has the lowest numer of attenders in both Melcourne and australia.

As can we seen from the graph is film club has around 65 participants in social centre, Which remain almost stable in two dacades. On the other hand, musicle performance at the least in the 2005 and after this it is going to be incresed drameticaly from 2005 to 2020. Table tanis has about 17 participation in 2000, from 2005 to 2010 it gain stability. However, the amateur dramatics has arund . Moreover, martial arts

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 126 words and leaving sentences incomplete, such as 'amateur dramatics has arund . Moreover, martial arts'. Furthermore, the student fails to complete the response, resulting in underdeveloped ideas and incomplete reporting of the data. While some main features are touched upon—such as mentioning that the film club has the highest participation—the overall summary is severely compromised by the lack of length and unfinished statements. As a result of these significant omissions and under-developed content, the task achievement is heavily penalised.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response attempts basic cohesion using markers such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'On the other hand', but the overall organisation is disrupted by the incomplete nature of the text and abrupt ending. Paragraphing is rudimentary and sentences lack proper structural flow. Referencing becomes unclear as the text breaks off mid-sentence towards the end, such as in 'amateur dramatics has arund . Moreover, martial arts'. While a rudimentary logical progression is attempted at the beginning, the breakdown in the latter half prevents the response from achieving higher coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include 'participation' used instead of 'participants', 'Musicle' instead of 'Musical', 'dacades' instead of 'decades', 'tanis' instead of 'tennis', and 'drameticaly' instead of 'dramatically'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'stable' and 'dramatically', but these are undermined by widespread spelling inaccuracies and awkward phrasing like 'lowest numer of attenders'. The lexical range is minimally adequate for basic communication but contains too many errors for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures attempted are very basic and frequently faulty. The response opens with a major grammatical error: 'The graph illustrate that the number of participation...', lacking a main verb for the relative clause structure. Other errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('film club has around 65 participants... Which remain') and incomplete sentences ('amateur dramatics has arund . Moreover, martial arts'). Complex structures are rarely attempted accurately, and frequent basic errors cause difficulty for the reader throughout the text.

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