Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph outlines information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the time 2000 to 2020.
Number of participants in film club in 2000 was 65, but showed a little bit decrease in trend but eventually reaches in 65 in 2020. Activity of martail arts showed 35 participants in 2000,but showed changing trend with the time and subsequently reaches 35 in 2020.
25 people took paticipate in amateur dramatics in 2000, but after this decline in trend occured with time and reached to 5 in 2020.Table tennis have 15 participants in 2000 , it showed a small increase in trend but in 2010 suddenly began upward trend and reached 50.Activity of musical performaces in 2000 was almost zero but showed interest in 2005 and resultanltly reached 15 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all the activities shown in the graph across the given time period, including film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. However, there is no overall overview provided, which is a key requirement for Academic Task 1. Furthermore, the word count is 138 words, failing to meet the minimum requirement of 150 words, which incurs a penalty. While some data points are correctly cited (such as amateur dramatics reaching 5 in 2020), the lack of an overarching summary and failure to meet the length requirement limit the score to band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, being presented as a single dense block of text, which significantly impairs readability and coherence. There is no clear overall progression or introduction. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, often relying on repetitive sentence structures such as 'in 2000 was ..., but showed ...'. Referencing and logical sequencing between sentences are weak. This level of organisation aligns closely with band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to convey basic data points, but it is repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'little bit decrease in trend' and 'changing trend with the time' are awkward and unnatural. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies, such as 'took paticipate' and 'musical performaces'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary, the limited range and frequent errors in collocation and word formation restrict the score to band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and coordinate clauses with frequent structural errors. There are numerous grammatical inaccuracies, such as missing articles ('Number of participants in film club'), tense inconsistencies, and spelling errors ('martail', 'paticipate', 'resultanltly'). Attempts at complex sentences often result in faulty syntax and punctuation issues. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the response at band 5.0.
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