Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The following illustration provides the data about various participants in different activities of a social club in two different countries for the two decades.

Overall, Film club is seen the highest amount of participants over the period of time while least number of activists took part in the activity of Amateur dramatics.

To begin with, Film Club saw a major upgradation through out the period of time from 2000 to 2020 which was approximately 65% while, Martial arts almost plateaued with minimal fluctuation from 2000 to 2020 it remained constant.

To look into more details, Amateur dramatics experienced a significant sharp decline from 2005 to 2020 and dropped from 25% to 5%. Table tennis slightly rose from 2000 to 2005 from15% to 20% and then had a dramatic inclined till the end of the period. Music performances are seen gradual upgradation from 2005 to 2020 and it rose up to 15% from its initial.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features and trends of the graph, identifying the highest and lowest categories and describing overall trajectories for categories such as Film club, Amateur dramatics, and Table tennis. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies regarding the data units. The student refers to percentages (e.g., 'approximately 65%', 'dropped from 25% to 5%'), whereas the vertical axis measures the absolute number of participants (up to 70). Additionally, the mention of 'two different countries' in the introduction is incorrect, as the prompt specifies a single social centre in Melbourne, Australia. While the general trends are captured, these data misinterpretations limit the band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs examining details. There is a logical attempt to sequence information using cohesive markers such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'To look into more details'. However, referencing and transitions are sometimes mechanical or awkward, such as starting paragraphs with 'To look into more details'. Paragraphing is present, but the overall progression is slightly hindered by inaccuracies in the introductory summary regarding the source material.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate to describe trends, featuring words like 'upgradation' (though non-standard), 'plateaued', 'fluctuation', and 'decline'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward word choices, such as 'number of activists' instead of 'participants', and treating absolute numbers as percentages throughout the text. Less common lexical items are attempted, but control is inconsistent, resulting in errors that occasionally affect precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Film Club saw a major upgradation through out the period of time from 2000 to 2020 which was approximately 65% while, Martial arts almost plateaued...'. There are several grammatical errors and punctuation flaws, including missing commas, misspelled words ('through out' instead of 'throughout', 'inclined' instead of 'increase'), and run-on phrasing. While meaning remains generally clear, errors in grammar and word formation recur.

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