Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates about partcipants, in the social activity centre in melbourne, Australia in 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the data is provided in numbers of individuals. The highest number of participants were film club and enrollment in Musical performences were lowest among individual.
Firstly, in 2000 film club had highest number of participants, accounted with upto 60 and till 2020 the number were almost remain unchanged. In Martial art however, participants were almost 35 and this ratio also stay remain same till at the end of the year except 2005 and 2015, the number were slightly decreased. Participants of amateur dramatics were almost 30, with slightly down, after 2005 the number were fall surprisingly, which remain only 10 in 2020. In 2000 player of Table tennis were 25 and number were gradually raised till 2010, after this year the player were increased rapidly, which acounted for 50 player. In activity of musical performance were least participants. From 2000 to 2005, no one were interested in this activity, after 2005 individual took part and in 2020 participants were almost 20.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, including general trends and specific categories like the film club and musical performances. However, there are several inaccuracies in reporting the data compared to the visual source. For example, the student states that in 2000 table tennis players numbered '25', whereas the graph shows 16, and describes musical performances as having 'no one' in 2005 when the value was 0, but then claims participants reached 'almost 20' in 2020 (the actual value is around 18). Furthermore, the overview is somewhat basic and the selection of data points contains inaccuracies, which places this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into three paragraphs, including an introduction, a brief overview, and a body paragraph. However, the overall progression is hampered by the lack of clear paragraphing for distinct trends, grouping nearly all data into one dense body paragraph. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively ('Firstly', 'In Martial art however', 'after this year'), and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as shifting pronouns between participants and activities. Paragraphing is insufficient to present the information logically, yielding a Band 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited vocabulary with noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'partcipants', 'performences', 'acounted', and 'player' instead of players or participants. While there are attempts to use vocabulary relevant to the visual data like 'decreased', 'raised', and 'rapidly', the range is narrow and inappropriate collocations ('ratio also stay remain same') cause some difficulty and distraction for the reader. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptor for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic compound forms. Attempts at complex sentences often result in severe grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the number were almost remain unchanged', 'player of Table tennis were 25 and number were gradually raised'). Punctuation and article use are also frequently faulty. Frequent errors cause noticeable strain and difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 criteria.
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