Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph show the information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period form [redacted phone].The finger are given Number of participants.
Overall, Film club had the highest Number of participants at the period while Amateur dramatics had the lowgest Number of participants at the period.
In 2000, Film club was about 65 Number of participants. In 2005, Film club decreased about to 64 Number of participants. In 2020, Film club increased about to 66 Number of participants.
In 2000, Martial arts was about 36 Number of participants. In 2005 Martial arts decreased about to 32 Number of participants. In 2020,Martial arts increased about to 33 Number of participants.
IN 2000, Amateur dramatics was about 26 Number of participants. In 2020, Amateur dramatics remaind about to Number of participants.
In 2000, Table tennis was about 9 Number of participants. In 2020 decreased about to 3 NUmber of participants.
In 2000, Musical performances was about 0 Number of participants In 2020, Musical performances increased about to 16 Number of participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the task by reporting information on the different activities shown in the line graph. An overview is provided, noting that the Film club had the highest participation and Amateur dramatics the lowest. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that Table tennis was about 9 in 2000 and decreased to 3 in 2020, whereas the graph shows it started at 16 and rose significantly to 54. Similarly, the data points for Martial arts and Amateur dramatics contain inaccuracies and omissions. Furthermore, the response is overly repetitive in its sentence structures when describing individual years. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response attempts a basic overall structure, featuring an introduction, an overview sentence, and subsequent sentences dedicated to individual activities. However, the progression lacks clear logical flow due to the heavy reliance on repetitive, isolated data points rather than synthesised trends and comparisons. Paragraphing is weak, with multiple short sentences forming a block rather than distinct thematic paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, often relying strictly on time markers like 'In 2000' and 'In 2020' at the start of nearly every sentence, which creates a jerky and disjointed reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms such as 'Number of participants', 'activities', and specific club names. There is little attempt to use less common lexical items or synonyms to describe trends (such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'rose dramatically'). Furthermore, there are noticeable word choice and transcription errors, such as 'show' instead of 'shows', 'center' (American spelling amidst otherwise British conventions), and 'finger are given' which appears to be a garbled phrase. The limited range and recurring errors cause occasional confusion for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost exclusively on simple subject-verb-complement structures (e.g., 'In 2000, Film club was about 65...'). There are frequent grammatical and mechanical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The line graph show'), incorrect prepositions ('at the period', 'form 2000-2020'), and incomplete or nonsensical phrasings ('Amateur dramatics remaind about to Number of participants'). Complex sentence forms are virtually absent. While basic meaning can sometimes be extracted, the high frequency of errors impacts readability.
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