Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrates the information the amount of partipicants for different actions at private social centre in Melbourn,Australia between 2000 and 2020. Overall,table tennis and musical performance increased albeit of varying rates. Others , on the other hand bucked the trend.
Focusing on the increases first,table tennis and musical performance grow noticeably. In 2000 table tennis stood at number 17, while in 2005 musical performance stood at zero.And before increasing to 55 and 19 in 2020.
By contrast, other activities decreased over the years. They had decreased from higher figure to lowest figure while this two activities increased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
Ushbu javob 150 so'zdan iborat minimal uzunlik talabini bajarmaydi va atigi 99 ta so'zni o'z ichiga oladi. Bu nomzodning vazifa talablarini to'liq qanoatlantirish imkoniyatini keskin cheklaydi. Umumiy sharh berish hamda asosiy xususiyatlarni (masalan, stol tennisi va musiqiy chiqishlar oshgani, boshqalari kamaygani kabi) tilga olishga urinish qilingan bo'lsa-da, keltirilgan ma'lumotlarda bir nechta noaniqliklar va kamchiliklar mavjud. Masalan, talaba 2000 yilda stol tennisi 17 ni tashkil etganini yozgan, holbuki jadvalda 16 ko'rsatilgan, shuningdek, ayrim oxirgi nuqta ko'rsatkichlari noaniq yoki noto'g'ri. So'z soni minimal miqdordan sezilarli darajada kam bo'lgani va asosiy tafsilotlar yetarlicha rivojlantirilmagani sababli, javob o'rta-quyi ballarga tushib qolgan.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Javob qisqacha kirish va ikkita qisqa asosiy qism paragrafidan iborat bo'lib, umumiy tendentsiya va maxsus tafsilotlarni taqdim etishga harakat qilgan. Biroq, matnning qisqaligi tufayli mantiqiy ketma-ketlik zaif. Bog'lovchi vositalar minimal darajada va ba'zan noqulay, masalan, 'Others , on the other hand bucked the trend' va 'while this two activities increased'. Paragraflarga bo'lishga harakat qilingan, ammo matnning haddan tashqari qisqaligi izchillikning har qanday samarali rivojlanishiga to'sqinlik qiladi. Gaplar orasidagi bog'liqlik ba'zida noaniq, xususan, oxirgi paragrafda 'other activities' va 'this two activities' aniq kontekstual tayanchga ega emas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Ishlatilgan lug'at juda oddiy va takrorlanuvchi. Bir nechta imlo xatolari mavjud, jumladan 'participants' o'rniga 'partipicants', 'Melbourne' o'rniga 'Melbourn' va tipografik oraliq muammolari. Talaba 'bucked the trend' kabi kamroq uchraydigan ayrim so'z yoki iboralarni qo'llashga harakat qilgan, lekin umuman olganda lug'at boyligi tor va to'liq amalga oshirilgan akademik vazifa javobi uchun yetarli emas. So'z tanlash ba'zida 'activities' o'rniga 'different actions' kabi noaniq yoki g'ayritabiiy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Javob juda cheklangan jumla tuzilmalari diapazoniga ega. Vergul va nuqtalardan keyin probellar yo'qligi, noto'g'ri ko'rsatish olmoshlari moslashuvi ('this two activities') va noqulay ifodalar ('While in 2005 musical performance stood at zero.And before increasing...') kabi tez-tez uchraydigan grammatik va tinish belgilaridagi xatolar mavjud. Ikkinchi paragrafning ikkinchi jumkasi 'And' bilan boshlanuvchi chala jamoadir. Oddiy gaplar odatda tushunarli bo'lsa-da, murakkabroq tuzilmalarga urinishlar ravon o'qishga to'sqinlik qiladigan sezilarli xatolarni keltirib chiqaradi.
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