Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the figure of competitors for several leisure activities at a community centre in Melbourne, Australia for the years of 2000 to 2020.
Overall, there are five different activities. Film club, table tennis, musical performances shows significant rise over the period, while the other activities such as martial arts and amateur dramatics show fluctuation and downward trend.
In 2000, the numbers of participants in film club at highest position around about 64. Moreover, table tennis had 16 number of attendees and musical performances contain zero candidate. But by passing years musical performances and table tennis shows dramatically increase in the number of peopl.While film club shows slightly increase and reach almost 67 number in the year of 2020.
In the year of 2000, the number of individuals envolved in activities like matrial arts and amateur gives flctuation and steadly reducing figure. Martial arts shows fluctuation by rising and reducing and at the end of 2020 it remains same as intial year value. On the other hand amateur shows minimally rising value from 2000 to 2005 but it suddenly fell down from 25 to 5 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover the main trends in the line graph, providing an overview and mentioning most of the categories such as the film club, table tennis, musical performances, martial arts, and amateur dramatics. However, there are numerous inaccuracies in reporting specific data points and trends. For example, the student claims that musical performances and table tennis showed a 'dramatic increase' from zero, which is partially true for table tennis (growing from 16 to 54), but musical performances actually started at zero in 2000 and 2005 before appearing in 2010. Furthermore, there are awkward phrasing issues like 'figure of competitors' instead of participants. While the response presents an overview and main features, the imprecise data reporting and under-development of comparisons place this at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text is divided into four paragraphs, following a logical layout with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific categories. Cohesive devices and transition markers are attempted, such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand'. However, referencing and transitions are sometimes mechanical or confusing, as seen in sentences like 'But by passing years musical performances and table tennis shows dramatically increase'. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate for an academic report, but the mechanical nature of the cohesion and occasional awkward tracking of ideas prevent the response from reaching Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited but adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some topic-specific and comparative terms such as 'fluctuation', 'downward trend', and 'participants'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors, awkward collocations, and misspellings throughout the text, including 'figure of competitors' (instead of participants), 'matrial arts' (spelling error), 'envolved' (spelling error), and 'peopl'. Vocabulary repetition is also evident, with words like 'shows', 'rise', and 'increase' overused. These errors cause some distraction and occasionally strain the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is quite low. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'Film club, table tennis, musical performances shows' and 'musical performances and table tennis shows'. Other structural errors include 'the numbers of participants in film club at highest position around about 64' and missing articles or prepositions. While the meaning is generally decipherable, the frequency of basic grammatical errors restricts the score to a Band 5.0.
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