Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the line graph illustrates number of participants in 5 different activities at social centre in melbourne ,australia for the period 2000 to 2020. walil some activities note signifcant growth and some exprienced decline,and some remain consistent .

in 2000 the film club was most popular among the people about 65 participants paticipated ,and than slight down the number of participants to 60 in 2010 following ten years the status of the number is resituate. it still remain highly participated activity

martial arts participation was hold 2nd highest participative activity in 2000 ,the number fluctuate between 30 to 40 in the duration of 20 years and resituat in 2020 .

amateure dramatics showed about 28 participant between 2000to2005 ,than noted drastically decline in durtion of 15 years to nuber of 5 participants.

table tennis showed drametically rise in the number of participants . average 18 participants were people participate in it for at the begining of 5 year than it remain cosistant for following 5 year moreover, noticable pic to 55 participant in duration of following ten years and it hold 2nd position in 2020 for participation .

musical performances trand was started in 2005 with 0 particiption than tand was gredually increase durig the following 10 year and the number also increase till 2020 around 19 participant noticed lastlly .

in conclution ,the popularity of activities at social centre varied significantly over the 20 year period ,with table tennis emerging as fast growing activity and a,atute dramatics experiencing the most sustantial decline .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student attempts to cover all parts of the prompt by describing the main trends and data points for the five activities shown in the line graph. An overview is attempted in the introduction and conclusion, noting growth, decline, and consistency across the 20-year period. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reading the data, such as claiming musical performances started with 0 in 2005 (the graph starts in 2000 at zero) and stating amateur dramatics dropped to 5 participants (it drops to approximately 6). While key features are selected, the overall data reporting lacks precision, placing this response at Band 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs for individual activities, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor punctuation, a lack of capitalization, and weak cohesive devices. Sentences are often awkwardly linked using basic connectors like 'than' (instead of 'then') or run together without proper punctuation. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical, leading to a choppy reading experience. This aligns with a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts some less common vocabulary relevant to data description, such as 'signifcant growth', 'exprienced decline', 'drametically rise', and 'sustantial decline'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('walil', 'paticipated', 'resituate', 'amateure', 'durtion', 'nuber', 'cosistant', 'gredually', 'conclution', 'a,atute'), incorrect word forms ('participative' instead of 'participation', 'trand' instead of 'trend'), and basic word choice errors. The vocabulary is adequate to convey the general message, but heavy spelling and form errors cap the score at Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak throughout. There is a total absence of capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns ('melbourne ,australia'). Run-on sentences and comma splices are common, such as in 'walil some activities note signifcant growth and some exprienced decline,and some remain consistent .' Verb tense usage is inconsistent when referring to past trends. Due to frequent grammatical and punctuation errors that occasionally impede smooth reading, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

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