Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This graph shows the information about the numaric data of participants for several activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period of 2000 to 2020 like two decades, by the use of different types of lines to symbolise the activites.
There are five activies as shown in the chart those who participate at social center in Melbourne Australia.The name of those are participats are Film club , Martial arts, Amateur dramatics,Table Tennis and last one is Musical performances till 2000 to 2020.
In addition to it the report shows the numarical data about the particpants with year and the number of participants by using the lines. those who are In trend they started in 2000 to 2020, Film club 70 that is the most highest rank, and the chart aslo shows the least rank; the name of which activity is Musical performances. but it can also show the Amateur dramatics participants slow down in 2005 to 2020 like dramatic change.
However the rest of the other three activites like Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, and Table tennis have been participating since 2000 to 2020 but on average.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, mentioning activities such as the Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances between 2000 and 2020. However, the data reporting is highly inaccurate, confused, and fragmented. For instance, the writer states that the Film club had '70 that is the most highest rank', which misinterprets the data points, and the overall description of trends is vague. The overview is poorly formulated and lacks a clear summary of the major trends. While the prompt is addressed at a basic level, the lack of accurate data selection and development places this firmly at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisational structure is very weak. The text is divided into four paragraphs, but the logical progression within and between them is lacking. Sentences such as 'In addition to it the report shows the numarical data about the particpants with year and the number of participants by using the lines' are repetitive and do not guide the reader effectively. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'however the rest of the other three activites...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas are jumbled together without clear thematic grouping, resulting in a score of 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is basic, repetitive, and marred by numerous spelling errors such as 'numaric', 'activites', 'participats', and 'numarical'. The writer relies heavily on simple terms and phrases copied from the prompt. Attempts to use less common vocabulary fail due to inaccurate word choice and collocations, such as 'most highest rank' and 'dramatic change'. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a clear academic description, leading to frequent comprehension difficulties for the reader, which aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited. The response consists primarily of faulty complex sentences and run-on structures that obscure meaning. For example, 'There are five activies as shown in the chart those who participate at social center in Melbourne Australia.' contains severe structural errors and awkward relative clauses. Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic throughout the text. Frequent grammatical errors distort the meaning and cause considerable difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.
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