Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities that were held at one social center in Melbourn, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, there were 70 paticipants involved in the activities from 2000 to 2020. Six activities were performed, that name was filmclub, material arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance.

Initially, film club activity were perfomed by 65 participants at heighst level from 2000 to 2020. there were minor change record in 2010, in whic number of participants were about 60. In contrast the dramatic change were seend in the table tennis that start from 15 participants in 2000 to 2010, and it increased to 55 participants from 2010 to 2020.

On the other hand, the activities of material arts remained stable with 35 participants and there were minor ups and downs recorded from 2000 to 2020. the number of participants were decreased in Amateur dramatics activities that started from 25 participants in 2000 and ends with 5 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the overall trends for activities such as table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the overview is factually incorrect and confused (stating there were 70 participants total across the period rather than summarizing trends). Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in the data reporting, such as claiming film club had 65 participants constantly and listing musical performances as missing entirely from the breakdown (only mentioning five activities while the graph has five, but missing the name and data for musical performances). Key comparisons are underdeveloped, limiting the score to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into four paragraphs, providing a basic structure typical of Task 1 essays. However, progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing statements, such as the sudden shift into the second paragraph. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'In contrast the dramatic change were seend'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and paragraphing is poorly executed regarding the selection of body points. This fits the Band 5 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive ('participants', 'activities', 'increased', 'decreased'). There are several spelling and word-choice errors, including 'Melbourn' for Melbourne, 'paticipants', 'filmclub', 'material arts' instead of martial arts, 'heighst' for highest, and 'perfomed'. Less common lexical items are attempted but used inaccurately. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5 level of lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical and punctuation errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('film club activity were perfomed'), tense inconsistencies ('that start from... and it increased'), and awkward phrasing ('in whic number of participants were about 60'). Complex structures are attempted but are frequently faulty. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score firmly at Band 5.0.

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