Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below provides a piece of information on the number of participants for various activities at one social centre of the country Melbourne, Australia for the period between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the line graph shows a difference between activities. Number of participants are highest in the social centre of Film club throughout the 20 years. Additionally, musical performance has less adapted activity throughout the years. The highest participants are 65 and lowest are exactly 15.
In terms of social activities in Melbourne and Australia, at start musical performances has a surge in its participants between 2005 and 2020. Another activity was table tennis that has a dramatic shift in number of participants from 15 to 65 approximately. Meanwhile, it remained constant through 3 years.
Furthermore, martial arts participants remained constant between 2000 and 2020. Their overall participants was 36 to 38. Another point to consider, amateur dramatics is the lowest activity chosen among all of them. Its values dropped significantly from 26 to 5. Moreover, table tennis and musical performances are a bit different. Table tennis has a sudden climbed in its participants from 2010 to 2020 and musical performances has significant surge in its values from 0 to 25 roughly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the Film club as having the highest participation and noting trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that musical performances start at zero and reach 25 roughly, whereas the graph shows it peaking around 18. Additionally, the overview is vague and contains inaccurate summaries of the overall data. While the response addresses the prompt generally, the inaccuracies in data interpretation pull the task achievement score down to a band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting to group information logically. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures, such as 'In terms of social activities in Melbourne and Australia, at start musical performances has a surge...'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly, and referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between data points. Paragraphing is present, but internal logical flow requires better management to achieve a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'less adapted activity', 'a sudden climbed', and 'provides a piece of information'. There are also issues with word forms (e.g., 'participants are highest' instead of 'participation is highest'). While the candidate attempts some less common vocabulary like 'surge' and 'dramatic shift', inaccuracies in word choice and collocation occasionally impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response shows a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple and slightly complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Number of participants are highest', 'musical performances has'), tense inconsistencies, and incorrect prepositions ('at one social centre of the country Melbourne'). These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band.
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