Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
THE GIVEN GRAPH GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE FIGURE OF PARTICIPANTS FOR VARIOUS ACTIVITIES AT ONE SOCIAL CENTRE IN MELBOURNE AUSTRALIA FOR THE PERIOD BETWEEN 2000 AND 2020.THE DATA OF GRAPH MEASURED IN NUMBERS.
IT IS CLEARLY VISIBLE FORM THE GRAPH THE LARGEST SEGMENTS OF THE FLIM CLUB IN WHICH MANY PEOPLE PARTICIPATED REST IF THE GRAPH.ON THE OTHER HAND MUSICIAL PERFOAMNCES HAD LOWEST PARTICIPANTS ALL THE GRAPH.
TAKING ABOUT TABLE TANNIS .THE PARTICIPANTS WAS INVLOVES AROUND 27 NUMBERS IN TABLE TANNIS WHICH SLIGHTLY DESCREASE WITH 8 NUMBER IN 2020.65 NUMBERS OF PARTICIPATION IN FLIM CULB ACTIVITY WHICH GRADUALLY INCREASE WITH 69 PEOPLE
,IN 2000, 0 PEPLE PATICIPANTS IN MUSICAL PERFOMANCES WHICH GRADUALLY INCREASE WITH 18 PEOPLE
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on several activities from the line graph, including the film club, musical performances, and table tennis. However, the response is severely under-length, containing only 116 words compared to the required minimum of 150 words. Furthermore, the information reported contains severe factual inaccuracies when compared to the visual data. For instance, the student states that table tennis involved around 27 participants in 2000 which decreased to 8 in 2020, whereas the chart shows it started at 16 and rose to 54. The overview is rudimentary and mechanical, and several details are misread or poorly articulated. These shortcomings restrict the score for this criterion to band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is broken into very short, disjointed blocks and single-sentence paragraphs, lacking a logical overall progression. Paragraphing is inappropriate and erratic, with the entire text written in all capital letters, which creates a negative visual impact. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with clumsy transitions such as 'TAKING ABOUT TABLE TANNIS' and excessive use of disconnected statements. Pronoun referencing and logical linking between sentences are generally faulty, making the text difficult to follow smoothly. Overall, the organization falls short of band 5 standards due to the lack of coherent paragraphing and effective cohesive ties.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. The student relies on rudimentary terms such as 'FIGURE', 'PARTICIPANTS', and 'ACTIVITY', alongside numerous severe spelling errors ('FLIM' instead of film, 'MUSICIAL PERFOAMNCES', 'TANNIS' for tennis, 'INVLOVES', 'DESCREASE', 'PEPLE', 'PATICIPANTS'). There is a lack of control over word formation and collocations, and the frequent typographical and spelling errors impede the reader's understanding. While the student attempts some topic-related vocabulary, the sheer volume of lexical inaccuracies and the restricted range place this performance firmly at band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, fragmented clause structures with frequent omission of necessary verbs and prepositions (e.g., 'THE DATA OF GRAPH MEASURED IN NUMBERS', 'THE PARTICIPANTS WAS INVLOVES'). Complex structures are absent, and basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are poorly handled throughout (e.g., 'WHICH SLIGHTLY DESCREASE WITH 8 NUMBER'). Punctuation is largely neglected or misapplied, and capitalization is entirely in uppercase. The frequency of grammatical errors and structural incompleteness causes constant strain for the reader, fitting the descriptor for band 4.0.
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