Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph delineates the trajectory of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia over a year period spanning from 2000 to 2020. Overall, the data is calibrated in numbers.
Overall, it is manifest that film club experienced a prominent upward trend, whereas amateur dramatics witnessed a notable decline over the time frame. Notably, despite some intermediate fluctuations, table tennis or amateur dramatics remained the dominant metric throughout the entire duration. The gap between the highest and lowest variables widened significantly by the end of the period.
In regard to the initial data point, In 2000, the figure for film club stood at 65 participants, which was substantially higher than that of amateur dramatics at merely 5 participants. Over the subsequent 2000 year, the table tennis climbed steadly to reach a pinnacle of 55 participants in 2020. Conversely, table tennis gradually bottomed out at 15 participants midway through the timeline before experiencing a marginal recovery.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, providing an overview and mentioning some trends, such as the rise in film club and decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in the data reported. For instance, the student states that the figure for film club stood at 65 in 2000 and that amateur dramatics was 'merely 5', whereas the actual values are around 64 and 26 respectively. Furthermore, there is considerable confusion regarding the data series, with table tennis being incorrectly substituted or mixed up with other activities in the body paragraph (e.g., claiming table tennis remained the dominant metric or bottomed out at 15 midway). These severe data errors and contradictions place the task response into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introductory overview followed by body paragraphs. However, logical progression and coherence are severely undermined by confusion within the body text. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'Over the subsequent 2000 year' instead of a correct time reference. Referencing between sentences becomes unclear because the student mixes up the subjects of the graph (referring to table tennis and amateur dramatics interchangeably or incorrectly). Paragraphing is present, but overall structural flow is disrupted by these data discrepancies and referencing errors, resulting in a Band 5 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'delineates', 'trajectory', 'prominent upward trend', and 'intermediate fluctuations'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation inaccuracies. For instance, the phrase 'the data is calibrated in numbers' is awkward, and 'the table tennis climbed steadly' contains a spelling error ('steadly') and an incorrect subject-verb pairing if intended as a description of movement. While there is a sufficient range of vocabulary to attempt the task, the frequent lexical inaccuracies and confusion regarding the subject names limit the score to a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'which was substantially higher than that of amateur dramatics'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text, featuring errors such as 'over a year period' (missing article/modifier) and 'Over the subsequent 2000 year' (grammatically incorrect time phrase). Punctuation and phrasing errors, combined with faulty complex structures, cause some difficulty for the reader and frequent errors persist, characteristic of Band 5.
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