Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in 2000 to 2020.
It is clear that all over the year participants of film club are always in higher position and in musical performance the number of participants lowest than other activity.
Firstly talking about film club participants as we said it had highest participants number which is above 60 all over the year. Then coming to the martial arts this number was always fluctuated and it was always between 30 to 40 . Amateur dramatics participants in 2000 was near 30 but in 2020 in decreased slightly to under 5 .
The number of participants of table tennis were near 15 and then it grow highly by 50 in 2020. Lastly musical partcipants were starting from 2005 and it increased a little by near 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all the main activities in the graph and attempts to make comparisons. However, there is a penalty because the student's text is under the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 147 words. Furthermore, the overview is extremely basic and lacks clarity. While the student identifies that the film club is consistently the highest, they misstate the trajectory of amateur dramatics by claiming it decreased to under 5 from 30 (the graph shows it started at 26 and dropped to 6). Data reporting is sometimes imprecise, such as stating table tennis 'grew highly by 50 in 2020' rather than reaching 54. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, warranting a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction and separate body paragraphs for different trends. However, cohesion is weak and often mechanical, relying on conversational transitional phrases like 'Firstly talking about', 'Then coming to the', and 'Lastly'. Logical progression between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and referencing is poor, such as using 'this number' ambiguously. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas lacks sophistication. This reflects the characteristics of Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive, with basic vocabulary such as 'higher position', 'highest participants number', and 'increased a little'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'participants of film club', 'musical partcipants', and 'grow highly'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'partcipants'. The vocabulary used is just about adequate to convey the basic message, but the lack of flexibility and precision keeps this at a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing prepositions and incorrect verb tenses or forms (e.g., 'all over the year participants of film club are always in higher position', 'in 2020 in decreased slightly', 'were starting from 2005'). Punctuation is also erratic in places. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the score from reaching Band 6.0, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor well.
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