Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrates the the data of participate in different activities in Melboure, Australia in between 2000 to 2020.
According to the graph, in 2000 film club had 70 members, while, amateur dramatics had 25 participants. Musical performance had 0 members in 2000. Futhermore, 25 and 35 members were participate in martial arts and table tennis. Numbers of participate were flacuated till 2010 but in 2005 people participate in musical performances.
As can be seen from the graph that, in 2010 Amateur dramatics and table tennis were same participants 25 members. participants in musical performance were rose at 10 members in 2010. However, flim club and martial arts participants were flacuated. Number of participants in table tennis were rapidly grow by 50 members in 2020. While amateur dramatic participants were fall 9 members. Moreover, 20 members were take a part in musicial performance. While film club and martial arts maintained their status at 35 and 65 members in 2020
In conclusion, highest number of people were participants in film clube and amateur darmatics were at loss . table tennis and musical performance were grow year by year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting information from the graph, but it contains significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the student states that the film club had 70 members in 2000 (actual was around 64) and that amateur dramatics had 25 participants (actual was 26). Furthermore, several data points are misreported or confused throughout the body paragraphs. While a basic overview is present, the lack of precision and inaccurate reporting of key features prevent the response from achieving a higher band score. It satisfies the overall purpose of summarising the chart, but falls short on accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inappropriately, such as repetitive use of 'while' and 'furthermore'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow within paragraphs lacks clear logical links, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of trends over the 20-year period.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'participate' instead of participants, 'flacuated' for fluctuated, 'futhermore', 'flim', and 'darmatics'. The student attempts some vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'grow', 'fall'), but control over word formation and collocation is weak. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing the response firmly in the band 5 category for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are notable issues with verb tenses and forms, such as 'members were participate' and 'participants in musical performance were rose'. Punctuation is inconsistent, and complex structures are either absent or attempted with frequent errors that impede clarity. The high frequency of grammatical mistakes places this criterion at band 5.
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