Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line chart provides data on the numbers of members for various at one community centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club had the highest number of attendee by ativity 2000 to 2020. Whereas, the percentage of contestant lowest musical performances around 0 to 19%.
In this state, film club had the greatest percentage at 64% to 65% people particioants by activity 2000 to 2020, Compared with, table tennis biggest increased significantaly from 16 participants in 2000 to 19 in 2005. it then remained stable at around 18 in 2010, before rising sharply to 33 in 2015 and reaching 50% in 2020.
On the other hand, the number of participants amateur dramatics increase 25% to 26 in 2005, rapidly delined to 20% in 2010 and reaching 5% in 2020. Furthermore, the people of participants activity martial arts fluctuated slightly between 2000 and 2020. it startes at 35 contributors in 2000, fell to 30 in 2005, then rose to 35 in 2010. After that, it decreased to 30 in 2015 and increased slightly to 32 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main trends in the chart, noting the highest participation for the film club and the significant upward trend for table tennis, alongside details for amateur dramatics and martial arts. However, the response contains numerous inaccurate data points, such as stating that table tennis reached '50%' instead of 54 participants, and confusing absolute numbers of participants with percentages (e.g., 'percentage of contestant lowest musical performances around 0 to 19%'). The overview is vague and poorly articulated. These inaccuracies and under-developed comparisons restrict the task response to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework for an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, confusing phrasing ('In this state...'), and mechanical or inappropriate use of cohesive devices (e.g., 'Compared with, table tennis...'). Reference words are sometimes ambiguous, and sentences lack smooth logical links. Coherence is hindered significantly by the fragmented and sometimes disjointed flow of information, aligning the response with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and often imprecise or misused. The student frequently struggles with word choices and collocations, mixing up units like numbers and percentages (e.g., 'percentage at 64% to 65% people participants', 'delined to 20%'). There are also missing words in key parts of the introduction ('various at one community centre'). While there is a limited range of appropriate topic vocabulary such as 'participants', 'increased', and 'fluctuated', persistent lexical errors and strain caused to the reader place this at a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in severe errors. There are numerous basic grammatical errors, including missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb tenses, and fragment sentences (e.g., 'it startes at 35 contributors', 'Overall, film club had...'). Punctuation is also problematic, with inappropriate lowercase letters following full stops in the middle of paragraphs. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors, comfortably earning a Band 5.0.
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