Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the graph show participant of diffrent kind of activity in australia specially in melburn year 2000 to 2020.
look in to the graph fillm and club are high number then any other activity people are more adectid to engage in club house as well as spend their time .since 2000 till 2020 the graph is there are no decline as compare to other activity.
in melburn puplic more intersted in play in club and theater.
however recently peopel are getting more intersted in table tennis the numer are increase.
in year 2005 were very high number of playing table tennis as well as continuce rise graph percentag.
althogh we can see pleople are get in touch in with musical performance not much people but growing in puplic.
overall in australia puplic are foand of merage with phisicaly activity and spen their time .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by discussing several trends from the line graph, such as the Film Club remaining high and Table Tennis increasing. However, it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at 143 words, which directly impacts the completeness of the response. Furthermore, the selection of data is erratic and misinterprets certain figures, such as stating that 2005 had a very high number of table tennis players when the graph shows it was at 20. The overview is rudimentary and lacks a clear, comprehensive summary of the main trends. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is extremely weak. The response is broken into very short, disjointed fragments rather than proper paragraphs with clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with abrupt transitions like 'however recently' and 'in year 2005 were'. There is no clear overall structure, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Referencing is often unclear, such as pronoun usage referring back to ambiguous subjects. These features place the response firmly in Band 4.0 for cohesion and coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed by spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'diffrent', 'fillm', 'adectid', 'puplic', 'intersted', 'foand', and 'merage'. There are virtually no less common lexical items attempted accurately, and frequent inaccuracies such as 'spen their time' or 'phisicaly activity' strain the reader's understanding. The lexical range is minimal and inadequate for an academic task, corresponding to a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is severely restricted. The student relies almost entirely on simple sentence structures, many of which are incomplete or ungrammatical. There is a complete lack of control over basic syntax, evident in sentences like 'the graph show participant of diffrent kind of activity' and 'the numer are increase'. Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected. Errors are pervasive and frequently distort the intended meaning, matching the criteria for Band 4.0.
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