Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graph illustrates the information about the figures of individuals who participant in five different types of activities at social center in Melbourne and Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is apparent that the number of participants increased significantly. While, a film club's proportion shows the highest figures over the period. Whereas, the Amateur dramatic represents declined.

In 2000, the film club received the highest proportion of participants, it stood at 65 and following this it declined slightly at 60 in 2010. Meanwhile by 2020, the participants rose to around 68. Although the number of Martial arts fluctuated the period, falling from 36 in 2000 to 32 in 2005, before rising to 38 in 2010. After that, the figure declined to 34 in 2015 before increased slightly to 36 in 2020.

Turning to the remaining activities, the number of participants in Amateur dramatics was 26, which increased slightly to 28 in 2005. Followed by , a further fall to 14 in 2015 and just 7 in 2020. Table tennis increased significantly from 16 participants in 2000 to 53 in 2020. Similarly, musical performances also increased, from 0 in 2000 to 19 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student covers all parts of the task well, providing an overview of the main trends and selecting relevant data to report and compare across the five activities. The introduction paraphrases the prompt effectively, and the overview highlights the general increase in participation and the prominence of the film club alongside the decline in amateur dramatics. Key figures are reported accurately, such as table tennis rising significantly from 16 in 2000 to 53 in 2020. However, there are minor inaccuracies in some data points (e.g., stating the film club was 65 in 2000 when the visual shows 64, and reporting 68 instead of 66 for 2020). Despite these minor misreadings of the gridlines, the response successfully addresses all requirements of Academic Task 1, earning a solid Band 7.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organised into four paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs grouping the activities logically. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well to guide the reader through the data, with phrases like 'Overall, it is apparent', 'In 2000', 'Meanwhile', and 'Turning to the remaining activities'. However, there are some minor mechanical errors and punctuation lapses in cohesion, such as the dangling clause 'Followed by , a further fall to 14 in 2015' and the awkward transition 'While, a film club's proportion shows the highest figures over the period. Whereas, the Amateur dramatic represents declined.' These formatting and punctuation slips slightly disrupt the flow, but overall logical organisation and progression remain clear throughout, placing this response comfortably at Band 6.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing graphical data, successfully employing terms like 'fluctuated', 'declined slightly', 'rose', and 'significantly'. Less common lexical items are attempted, such as 'proportion', 'participants', and 'activities'. However, there are several word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'who participant in' (should be participating), 'a film club's proportion' (not a proportion of a total), and 'Amateur dramatic represents declined' (incorrect grammatical category and noun usage). Spelling is generally accurate, but the lexical errors prevent the score from reaching Band 7.0, making Band 6.0 a fair and accurate reflection of the vocabulary range and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating subordinate clauses and time markers effectively (e.g., 'Although the number of Martial arts fluctuated the period, falling from 36 in 2000 to 32 in 2005...'). However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are noticeable errors such as 'who participant' (tense/form error), missing prepositions ('at social center' instead of at a social centre), missing words in 'fluctuated [over] the period', and fragment sentences like 'Followed by , a further fall to 14 in 2015 and just 7 in 2020.' While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from achieving a Band 6.5, aligning it well with Band 6.0.

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