Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph compares the different activities at one social centre such as film club,martial arts,amateur dramatics, table tennis, musical performances at Melbourne a city of Australia between 2000 to 2020 in different number of . participants.
There is a simultaneous rise in the number of participants about 60 to 70 from the given period 2020 to 2020. The graph shows suddenly decreased in the amateur dramatics while in contrast, an increased in the tablle tennis. However there is slight inreased in the number of participants from 2005 to 2020.
During the 2000 to 2020 there are different activities conducted in one social centres at Melbourne listed as film club,martial arts,amateur dramatics, table tennis, musical performances.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 115 words. Consequently, the development of main features and comparisons is severely restricted. While the student attempts to introduce the graph and mentions some trends (such as the decrease in amateur dramatics and the increase in table tennis), the information provided is very limited, repetitive, and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the data. The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall trends. Under the official descriptors, this falls into Band 4.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is weak and disjointed. The response consists of three short, fragmented paragraphs, with the final paragraph awkwardly repeating the introduction's list of activities. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate (such as 'while in contrast, an increased'), and referencing is faulty, which disrupts the logical progression of ideas. Paragraphing is not used effectively to structure the report. This aligns with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily dependent on copying words directly from the prompt ('film club', 'martial arts', 'amateur dramatics', 'table tennis', 'musical performances'). There are notable word-choice and morphological errors, such as 'tablle' (spelling error), 'inreased', and 'an increased' instead of 'an increase'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient for a higher band score, restricting it to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and awkwardly structured sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'such as film club,martial arts... in different number of participants' and 'There is a simultaneous rise in the number of participants about 60 to 70 from the given period 2020 to 2020.' Punctuation and sentence structures are frequently faulty, causing strain for the reader and fitting the Band 4 criteria.
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