Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The supplied graph illustrates the information reprsents ratio of participants of inumerous physical activities in singal social coporation in melbourne autralia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, participation of table tennis sport individuals had low interest in starting 2000 also with the passege of time individuals participation flow rapidly grewup also amaleur dramalice sport had same participation in start of period also in 2020 this parcipation rapidly shown a downword trend.
Firstly, individuals had zero interest in misical performance in 2000 while, with
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 3.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.5
The response is severely under-length, containing only 82 words compared to the required minimum of 150 words. This significantly impacts task achievement as the summary is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. While the student attempts an overview and mentions a few categories such as table tennis and musical performances, the lack of development and failure to complete the task results in a low score. Key trends like the dominance of the film club are entirely omitted, and the abrupt ending prevents any full analysis of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a basic attempt to structure the response, using introductory phrases like 'Overall' and 'Firstly'. However, the organisation breaks down quickly due to the incomplete nature of the writing and fragmented sentences. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the response dissolving into disjointed blocks that lack logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'also with the passege of time', which creates confusion and disrupts the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and contains numerous severe spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'reprsents', 'inumerous', 'singal', 'coporation', 'melbourne autralia', 'passege', 'flow rapidly grewup', 'amaleur', 'dramalice', and 'misical'. These errors severely impede communication and demonstrate a limited lexical range that is inadequate for an academic task, restricting the score to the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 3.5
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The response relies on poorly constructed, overly long, and convoluted sentences that lack proper punctuation and capitalization (e.g., 'melbourne autralia'). There are persistent errors in basic syntax, verb forms, and preposition usage, such as 'participation of table tennis sport individuals had low interest'. The text cuts off mid-sentence, further reflecting a lack of control over sentence structures.
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