Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph clearly illustarte that number of participants took a part in different activities at social centre in melbourne.
As we see that data from 2000 to 2020 people set there prioritize towards entertainments film club it was always high from the begening of it.However marital arts remains itself at 2nd high in the begining it was in between 40% in 2005 it moved little down reached and 2010 it jumped
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length at only 72 words, falling well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. Consequently, it only minimally addresses the task. While the student attempts to introduce the chart and mentions a couple of activities such as the 'film club' and 'marital arts', the overview is incomplete, comparisons are missing, and the response trails off mid-sentence ('reached and 2010 it jumped'). Because of the significant length penalty and incomplete content, the task achievement cannot exceed a band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text consists of only two very short paragraphs and is abruptly cut off. There is no clear overall progression or logical structure. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical ('As we see that', 'However'), making the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is inadequate as the writing breaks off prematurely. While some introductory framing is attempted, the overall organisation fails to meet the criteria for higher bands.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'illustarte' instead of illustrate, 'begening' instead of beginning, and 'marital arts' instead of martial arts. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for an academic task, showing little ability to paraphrase or use less common lexical items effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of poorly constructed and incomplete simple sentences. There are serious grammatical errors, punctuation omissions, and run-on structures, such as 'The line graph clearly illustarte that number of participants took a part in different activities at social centre in melbourne.' The grammar breaks down completely towards the end, resulting in an ungrammatical fragment.
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