Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart compares number of participants in five various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, AUstralia from the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the highest number of participants accounted for Film club activity, followed by Martial arts. Meanwhile, there are lowest participant have seen in Musical performances. On the other side Participation declined gradually for Amateur dramatics. While for Table tennis it was increased rapidly with period.
FIrstly, Film club showed highest number of participation starting with about 65 in 2000 which remained unchanged until 2020. While for Martial arts followed same pattern with second largest position with about 38 in 2000 to 2020 Considerably.
Secondly, Amateur dramatics showed reverse trend started from approximately 28 in 2000 which gradually rose about 30 in 2005, declined steadily until 2020 with 9 only. Table tenis inclined significantly in 2010 with about 20 to just above 50 participants in 2020. lastly Musical performances were accounted lowest
participantation and started from 2005 to rose moderately at 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all major categories from the visual data, providing an overview and mentioning specific figures. However, there are several noticeable inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data. For instance, the student states that the Film club 'remained unchanged until 2020' (whereas it fluctuated slightly) and misinterprets the starting point and trends for Amateur dramatics and Musical performances. Additionally, the task prompt actually features a line graph, but the student mistakenly refers to it as a 'bar chart' in the opening sentence. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of data precision and factual inaccuracies pull the score down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Meanwhile, there are lowest participant have seen' and 'On the other side Participation declined'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is weak, making it sometimes difficult to follow the progression of ideas. This fits the profile for Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive. The student attempts some less common lexical items related to trends, such as 'declined gradually', 'increased rapidly', and 'reverse trend', but these are often marred by word-form and collocation errors, such as 'lowest participant have seen', 'Table tenis inclined significantly', and 'lowest participantation'. Spelling errors like 'FIrstly' and 'tenis' also occur. The range is minimally adequate to convey basic points, aligning with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('number of participants ... accounted for', 'there are lowest participant have seen'), missing articles ('starting with about 65'), and incorrect prepositions ('at 20 in 2020' instead of 'to 20'). These errors cause frequent strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
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