Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph compares the number of attendences for five diiferent activities film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance in Melbourne,Austarlia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that table tennis was constantly growing, while amteur dramatics experienced downtrend.
Film club tend to seen fluctuated starting around 62 and reach approximately 66 in the year of 2020. Furthermore, staring with less than 40 and climed towards 40 in 2020 for martial art, while table table tennis witnessed a sudden rise at under 20 in 2010 to 50 in 2020.
For the remaining, amateur dramatics was the only one showed sudden fall, begins with just above 20 and reach towards at 3, whereas musical performance find consestantly moderate growth. It starts with 0, then raeched 10 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying general trends such as the growth of table tennis and the decline of amateur dramatics. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the student states that amateur dramatics 'reach towards at 3' (it was actually 6 in 2020) and that musical performance reached 10 in 2020 (the actual figure was 18). Furthermore, the word count is 131 words, which fails to meet the minimum requirement of 150 words. This leads to a penalty under Task Achievement for under-length and incomplete data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a basic organizational structure with a brief introduction and an overview paragraph, followed by body paragraphs attempting to group data. However, paragraphing is underdeveloped, and referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'For the remaining' and 'Film club tend to seen'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes incorrectly. There is a lack of smooth progression between ideas, making the overall flow somewhat disjointed, which aligns with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'sudden rise', and 'moderate growth'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('diiferent', 'Austarlia', 'amteur', 'staring', 'climed', 'table table', 'find', 'consestantly', 'raeched') and awkward word choices or grammatical collocations like 'tend to seen' and 'musical performance find consestantly moderate growth'. This restricted and inaccurate vocabulary control places the response firmly in the Band 5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb forms ('Film club tend to seen'), and missing prepositions. Punctuation is also problematic in places. While the meaning can generally be discerned despite the frequent errors, the high density of structural inaccuracies prevents the response from achieving a Band 6.
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