Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illustrate that the number of individuals who participate in different activities at 1 social platform in melbourn , austrailia in between 2000 to 2020.
the overview of the linegraph is film club were the most has number of participanst from very start to very end.and the second main thing to notice , that were amateur dramatics has 25 number of participants in start of 2000, but this number was dramaticlly decrease at 2020 as compare to other activities.
firstly marital arts shows in graph had a very good percentage of individuals in 2000 aproximately 38 but this number were almost steady all overthe duration.The mian thing to notice that table tennis had little amount of individuals in 2000 but its was boomed from 2010 to 2020.
The worst activity perform we seen was musical performance , start from 2005 and increase number of participants from 2010 was only 10 individuals, and it was increased just 20 members in 2020,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, noting that the Film Club had the highest number of participants throughout the period, and highlighting the significant downward trend in Amateur Dramatics and the dramatic growth in Table Tennis. However, there are significant omissions and inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the overview lacks precision, and the description of the Musical Performances contains confused figures ('start from 2005 and increase number of participants from 2010 was only 10 individuals'). Furthermore, the response barely exceeds the minimum word count and suffers from severe under-development in several parts of the text. Overall, it addresses the task only partially, corresponding to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall organisation is weak and lacks a clear, logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with abrupt transitions between sentences and ideas (e.g., 'firstly marital arts shows...'). Paragraphing is poorly handled, with a lack of proper introductory and concluding structures. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly. These issues reflect the descriptors for Band 4.5 to 5.0, where cohesion is inadequate or repetitive.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms such as 'number', 'individuals', and 'activities', while frequently misspelling key words (e.g., 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'melbourn', 'austrailia', 'linegraph', 'participanst', 'dramaticlly', 'aproximately'). There are also awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'The worst activity perform we seen'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts related to the chart, frequent spelling and word-choice errors constrain communication, placing this at a Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are widespread errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and capitalization (e.g., lowercase letters at the start of sentences like 'the overview...', missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement issues such as 'this number were almost steady'). The sentence structures are frequently broken or ungrammatical, making comprehension difficult in places. These features align closely with Band 4.0 descriptors.
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