Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph depicts the information of numbers of people who participated in diverse activities at social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. Specifically, the activities are film club, martial arts, amatuer dramatics, tabel tennis and musical performances.

Overall, mostly people were involved in film

club which was recorded the highest activity and table tennis was on second number. However, people were least involved in amatuer dramatics compared to other activities.

In general, individuals engaged in film club were around 64 participants in 2000 and minimally increased to about 65 persons in 2020. Meanwhile, table tennis participation was around 16 participants in 2000 and dramatically increased to approximatelly 53 people. Moreover, people who engaged in martial arts were about 36 persons in 2000 and marginally increaed to 37 people in 2020.

Furthermore, there were no participation in music performances in 2000, however in 2005 people started to participate and increased sharply and reached to 14 participations in 2002. On the other hand, amatuer dramatics participation was about 26 in 2000 and slightly increased to around 27 in 2005, after that declined sharply and reached to only 5 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and trends of the five activities shown in the line graph. An overview is attempted, stating that the film club was the highest and amateur dramatics saw a drop. However, the overview is somewhat simplistic and contains minor inaccuracies regarding rankings (e.g., table tennis was not consistently second overall across the whole period, and the phrasing 'mostly people were involved' is awkward). Specific data points are generally accurate, such as noting that amateur dramatics started around 26 and dropped to 5 or 6, and table tennis rose significantly. There are slight misreadings of the final year figures (e.g., stating 65 for film club instead of approximately 66), but these are minor. Overall, the task response fulfills the requirements adequately, earning a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical layout with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific data. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'Specifically', 'Overall', 'Meanwhile', and 'On the other hand'. However, referencing and progression are sometimes clunky or mechanical. For instance, the transition 'Furthermore, there were no participation in music performances' lacks smooth integration, and paragraphing could be structured more logically to group rising versus declining trends. Overall arrangement is coherent, but minor lapses in cohesion keep this at a Band 6.0 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases like 'minimally increased', 'dramatically increased', and 'approximatelly'. However, there are several noticeable spelling errors ('amatuer', 'tabel', 'approximatelly', 'participations') and awkward word choices ('depicts the information of numbers of people', 'mostly people were involved', 'were no participation'). While these errors do not severely impede communication, they reflect typical Band 6 characteristics where lexical control lacks precision and slips occur frequently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'The graph depicts the information of... from 2000 to 2020' and 'while table tennis participation was around 16 participants in 2000 and dramatically increased'. There are several grammatical and mechanical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('there were no participation') and preposition errors ('participated... at social center'). Punctuation and sentence structures are generally clear enough to be understood, but the frequency of non-systematic errors places this firmly in the Band 6 category.

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