Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the information on the number of participants for various activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia commencing from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the graph compares 5 different activities where Film club is clearly leading amongst others on the other hand Musical performances started after 5 years later with the lowest contestants.
in the year 2000 there were only 4 options for the participants as the Musical performances starts after 5 years. where Film club looking the top of all activities as it started with 65 contestants though a small deep at 2005 to 2010 it conclude at top with 70. materials arts began at 35 with the second most number of people however by 2015 it was surpassed by Table tennis and ended at around the same number of participants after some roses and deeps.
Furthermore, Amateur dramatics and Table tennis incept with 25 and 15. After 2005 Amateur dramatics dropped drastically in contrast Table tennis stays static till 2010 and then take handsome numbers. Moreover Musical Performances started from 2005 with 0 people but will time showed increment and ended at 15.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, highlighting the Film club as the leader and contrasting it with Musical performances starting later with fewer participants. However, some of the data points reported contain inaccuracies when compared to the visual data. For instance, the student states the Film club started with 65 and ended at 70, whereas the graph indicates 64 and 66 respectively, and mentions Musical performances ended at 15 rather than approximately 18. Despite these minor data inaccuracies, the main trends—such as the dramatic rise of Table tennis and the decline of Amateur dramatics—are correctly identified and supported with figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged into four paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific activities. Ideas are generally logically sequenced, following a clear division of information. However, cohesion at the sentence level is sometimes faulty or mechanical, with abrupt transitions and awkward referencing. For example, expressions like 'on the other hand Musical performances started after 5 years later' lack smooth integration. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within the third paragraph is cluttered due to dense grouping of multiple activities without adequate signposting.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'surpassed', 'drastically', and 'static'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'contestants' instead of 'participants', 'small deep' instead of 'dip', 'materials arts' instead of 'martial arts', 'incept' instead of 'began' or 'commenced', and 'take handsome numbers'. These lexical errors and awkward phrasings occasionally impede communication, placing the response firmly in the Band 5 to 6 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing capitalization ('in the year 2000'), tense inconsistencies ('starts', 'looking', 'conclude'), preposition errors ('starts after 5 years', 'started from 2005'), and malformed relative clauses ('where Film club looking the top'). Furthermore, punctuation is weak, with run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning can generally be deciphered, the frequency of errors restricts the grammar score.
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