Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The graph depicts the information about the number of people who participated in diverse activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. Specifically, the activities are the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.

Overall, most people were involved in the film

club which recorded the highest activity and table tennis was second. However, people were least involved in amateur dramatics compared to other activities.

In general, individuals engaged in the film club were around 64 participants in 2000 and minimally increased to about 65 persons in 2020. Meanwhile, table tennis participation was around 16 participants in 2000 and dramatically increased to approximately 53 people. Moreover, people who engaged in martial arts were about 36 persons in 2000 and marginally increased to 37 people in 2020.

Furthermore, there was no participation in music performances in 2000, however in 2005 people started to participate and increased sharply and reached to 14 participats in 2002. On the other hand, amateur dramatics participation was about 26 in 2000 and slightly increased to around 27 in 2005; after that declined sharply and reached to only 5 participants in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. The overview clearly highlights that the film club was the most popular overall and table tennis came second, while amateur dramatics saw the least participation by the end of the period. Key data points are cited accurately, such as the film club starting at around 64 and table tennis experiencing a dramatic increase from 16 to approximately 53. However, there is a minor chronological slip in the fourth paragraph ('14 participats in 2002', which should be 2015 based on the graph timeline). Overall, the information is well-selected and fully meets the requirements for this band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organised with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introductory statement, followed by an overview paragraph, and then detailed body paragraphs grouping the trends effectively. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well, such as 'Specifically', 'Meanwhile', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand'. Paragraphing is handled appropriately, ensuring that different activities and their trajectories are discussed in distinct sections. Referencing is generally clear, though occasional transitional links feel slightly mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing graphical data, including terms like 'participated', 'minimally increased', 'dramatically increased', 'marginally increased', and 'declined sharply'. There are some attempts at less common lexical items and collocation, though a few minor inaccuracies or awkward phrasings occur, such as 'most people were involved in the film club which recorded the highest activity'. Spelling is generally accurate, with just one noticeable typo ('participats'). The lexical range is sufficient for precision and flexibility in task execution.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses ('which recorded the highest activity') and contrastive structures ('however in 2005 people started...'). There are some good examples of error-free sentences, alongside a few grammatical slips and awkward prepositional uses, such as 'individuals engaged in the film club were around 64 participants' (where 'number of participants' would be more precise) and the awkward clause construction 'reached to 14 participats'. Punctuation is generally sound, and these minor errors do not impede communication.

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