Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The assgine line graph shows the information about the number of participants for different activities at social center in Melbouren,Australia for the 2000 to 2020
overall the striking feature to be observed that be the film club was remained highest for the time period .Whereas , lowest amateur dramatics for the time period .
It can be vivdely seen that , from 2000 to 2005 the figure of film club was 65 . Afterthat, from 2005 to 2020 its remain at the highest peak . Moreover, from 2000 to 2005 the figure of martial arts from 35 to 32 . Then, the number of participants from 323 to 40 in 2010 . Furthermore, from 2005 to 2020 the figure of musical performances increase given time form 0 to 15 .
turning to the rest of description, from 2000 to 2010 the figure of amateur dramatics rising slightly from 15 to 20. Afterthat , the figure upsurge from 20 to 65 for time period .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to present an overview and select main features from the line graph, but it suffers from severe data inaccuracies, misreadings, and imprecise reporting. For instance, the student states that the figure for amateur dramatics upsurged to 65, whereas the graph clearly shows it dropping to 6. Similarly, the figure for martial arts is described as jumping to 323, which is a major transcription or reading error. While an overview is attempted mentioning the highest and lowest points, the overall development is hindered by incorrect data representation. This places the response in the Band 4.5 to 5.0 range for Task Achievement due to inaccurate reporting of data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organised into short paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas lacks logical clarity and coherence. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'overall the striking feature to be observed that be' and 'turning to the rest of description'. Punctuation is faulty, with frequent misuse of commas before conjunctions or isolated phrases. Paragraphing is attempted but remains basic. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, requiring the reader to struggle to connect the data points mentioned. This performance aligns with Band 5.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Vocabulary usage is very basic, repetitive, and marred by spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'assgine' instead of assigned/accompanying, 'Melbouren' for Melbourne, 'vivdely' for vividly, and 'remain' used incorrectly as a tense. There is little control over less common vocabulary, and lexical chunks are frequently awkward or misused. Spelling errors occur across common words, which occasionally strains the reader's understanding. However, basic terms for numbers and categories are present, which allows for a minimal interpretation of the intent, supporting a Band 4.5 descriptor, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures and fragmented clauses. There are persistent, major errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction. For example, sentences such as 'its remain at the highest peak' and 'the figure of martial arts from 35 to 32' lack main verbs entirely. Punctuation errors are widespread. While a few basic structures are formed correctly, the high frequency of grammatical errors and missing elements impedes clear communication in several places, corresponding to a Band 4.0 or 4.5, rounded to 4.5.
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