Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about the people who participate in various activities at one social centre in Australia's city Melbourne, namely film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances, from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it can be seen that 65 member participant in film club in 2000 which decreases gradually till 2010 after that it increases slightly, while no one participant in musical performances from 2000 to 2005 then it rose up rapidly in 2005 to 2020 almost 15 members participate in it.
The number of participants in film club and martial art shows no changes, it just fluctuate up and down. In 2000, only 65 persons participate in film club and 35 members participate in martial art. In 2010, participant in film club dropped to 60 and for martial art it grew to 40. In 2020, the participants of both activities are same like 2000.
The number of participants in amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances shows changes during the years. In 2010, only 23 persons participate in table tennis which climbed suddenly to 55 participants in 2020 and 28 members participate in amateur dramatics in 2005 which fell sharply from 28 to 8 members in 2020. participant in film club dropped to 60 and for martial art it grew to 40. In 2020, the participants of both activities are same like 2000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The candidate attempts to cover the main features of the graph, presenting an overview and mentioning most of the activities such as the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. However, there are notable inaccuracies in the data reported, such as stating that 'no one participant in musical performances from 2000 to 2005' when the figure started at zero and rose later, and repetitive data referencing towards the end of the text. The overview is also slightly disjointed and contains mechanical listing rather than a fully synthesised summary of trends. Nevertheless, key categories and general trends are identified, placing this response at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs attempting to group details. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward transitions, repetitive statements (for instance, repeating sentences about the film club and martial arts towards the end), and weak cohesive devices. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with pronoun usage and dangling clauses in sentences like 'In 2010, only 23 persons participate in table tennis which climbed suddenly...'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical, aligning with a Band 5.0 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting words like 'illustrates', 'gradually', 'fluctuate', and 'dramatically'. However, there are frequent lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'member participant in film club' instead of 'participants in the film club', and 'rose up rapidly'. Spelling and word formation are generally acceptable, but the repetition of basic verbs and nouns ('participate', 'participants', 'activities') limits the lexical range. These limitations restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilising relative clauses ('which decreases gradually') and time conjunctions ('while no one participant...'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in tense consistency, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'member participant', 'participant in film club dropped'), and missing articles. Many complex sentence attempts result in structural faults and run-on phrasing. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, the grammar performance sits firmly at Band 5.0.
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