Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the informations about the canditates in five different activities at social center in the Melbourne and Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period,desipte a slight decline before 2010.Table tennis experienced the significants growth ,becoming the second most popular activity after 2010.In contrast, Amsteur dramatics sharply declined ,while martial arts remained fluctuated .Musical performanaces also saw a grdual increase after 2005.
Looking into the Film club and Table tennis both are most favourite activity, Filim club are choosen by approximately 65 participants in 2000 to 60 particiapnts in 2010, again rising to 66 in 2010.Meanwhile Table tennis shows a clearly upward trend , rising slighly from 17 to 20 participants in 2005 and remains constants till 2010 , but then high rocked to 53 participants in 2020.In contrast, Martial arts fluctuated slightly, decreasing from 36 participants in 2000 to 31 in 2005, then increases from 38 in 2010.It fell to roughly 34 in 2015 and recovered slighly to 36 in 2020.
Turning to Amateur dramatics and Musical performaces both follows a opposite trends , Amateur dramatics slighly incline to 27 participants in 2000 to 29 in 2005 and shows a quick decline in 2005 to 2020 only around participants.However,Musical performances slightly upwards wave in 2005 to 2010 for 10 particapants, buyt then gradually incline to 15 participants in 2015 to 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the five activities over the twenty-year period. A clear overview is provided in the second paragraph, highlighting the overall dominance of the film club and the significant growth of table tennis. Key data points are cited to support the descriptions, such as the peak of table tennis reaching 53 participants in 2020 and the film club remaining popular at around 60 to 66 participants. However, there are some minor data inaccuracies and contradictions, such as stating that the film club rose to 66 in 2010 when the graph shows it was approximately 60. Despite these minor lapses, the main trends are adequately captured, earning a Band 6.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into four logical paragraphs, including an introduction, an overall summary, and two body paragraphs detailing specific activities. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader through the data, with phrases like 'Overall', 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', and 'Turning to'. However, referencing and cohesion are occasionally faulty or mechanical, and paragraphing could be smoother. For example, some sentences are run-together without proper punctuation, and transitions between ideas within sentences feel slightly clumsy. Nevertheless, there is a clear overall progression that warrants a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'significants growth', 'fluctuated', and 'upward trend'. However, there are several noticeable lexical errors, awkward word choices, and spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'informations', 'canditates', 'desipte', 'Amsteur', 'performanaces', 'grdual', 'high rocked', and 'inclines'. While these errors do not severely impede communication, their frequency prevents the score from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks precision and control, aligning with a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like relative clauses and comparative constructions. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'Film club are choosen', 'Martial arts remained fluctuated', 'both follows a opposite trends', and missing articles. Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, are also prevalent. Although simple sentences are generally understood, complex structures often contain errors that require the reader to work harder, placing this performance at a Band 5.5.
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