Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the information about number of individuals participating in five distinct social activities( film club, table tennis, musical performances, martial arts and Amateur dramatics) in one Australian region, Melbourne between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity through-out the period, while, table tennis experienced the dramatic growth. By contrast, Amateur dramatics declined sharply and became the least popular activity at the end of period. Moreover, martial arts represented the modest change over the time, followed by musical performances increased gradually after being introduced.

In 2000, around 64 people contributed significantly in film club and made it the most demanding social activity, however, its value slightly decrease to 60 in 2010, thereafter recovering about 65 people in 2015 to 67 in 2020. By contrast, approximately 18 individuals took part in table tennis, followed by slight increase in 2010 and reached its peak in 2020 to around 57 people. No one took part in musical instrument at that time. While remaining activities like martial arts and Amateur dramatics recorded 37 and 17 people respectively.

Regarding 2020, film club remained popular among individual, followed by second most demanding activity, table tennis attracted 58 people in 2020. By contrast, the value of Amateur dramatics fell dramatically thereafter, consequently reached its lowest value to 4 people in 2020. Martial arts fluctuated modestly, dropping to about 32 people in 2005 and then rising to 38 in 2010 and again stood at the value of 38 by the end of twenty years period. The figure of people for musical instruments represented the considerable growth and rose from around 0 in 2015 to 19 people in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and key comparisons across the five activities shown in the line graph. An effective overview is provided in the second paragraph, capturing the overall trends correctly (e.g., the film club remaining the most popular, table tennis experiencing dramatic growth, and amateur dramatics declining sharply). Data points and figures are generally reported accurately and correspond well to the visual source, such as the peak of table tennis and the steady nature of martial arts. The response is fully developed and well-focused on the prompt, meeting all requirements for Task Achievement at a high standard.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organised with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introductory paraphrase, moves into a well-crafted overview paragraph, and then follows up with detailed body paragraphs broken down by trends and years. Paragraphing is used appropriately. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'while', 'By contrast', and 'consequently' are employed to guide the reader through the data, although there is a slight mechanical feel to some of the transitions between data points. Referencing is generally clear, contributing to a coherent and easy-to-follow text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate to good range of vocabulary suitable for an Academic Task 1 response, including less common lexical items such as 'participating', 'dramatic growth', 'declined sharply', and 'fluctuated modestly'. There are, however, some minor word choice and collocation inaccuracies, such as 'musical instrument' instead of 'musical performances', 'demanding' used in place of 'popular', and minor prepositional slips like 'through-out'. Despite these occasional errors, the lexical range is sufficient to convey meaning with flexibility and precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms effectively, incorporating subordinate clauses and participial phrases (e.g., 'after being introduced', 'dropping to about 32 people in 2005'). There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures present, such as 'illustrates the information about number of individuals' (missing article), 'followed by musical performances increased gradually' (awkward coordination of verbs), and 'film club remained popular among individual' (singular instead of plural). However, these errors rarely impede communication, and the majority of sentences demonstrate good control.

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