Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph illustrates the data on the number of participants for different activities - film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, over the period of 20 years.
Overall, the film club had the highest number of participants throughout the period, while table tennis participants decreased dramatically and had the lowest number of participants.
In 2000, the film club participants stood at 65, considerably higher than martial arts(39), amateur dramatics(29), and table tennis (19). This changed slightly to 60 by 2010 and is predicted to rise to about 70 by 2020. Martial arts fluctuated slightly throughout the period and is predicted to remain the same by 2020.
Meanwhile, Amateur dramatics rose moderately to 30 participants and then fell dramatically by 2015, and is expected to fall further by 2020 to approximately 5 participants. Table tennis, by contrast, rose gradually to about 20 participants by 2010, then followed a steadier upward path to about 30 participants by 2015 and is predicted to rise further by 2020 to about 55 participants. However, Musical performances introduced in 2005 rose significantly and are expected to grow to roughly 15 participants by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and trends of the five activities shown in the graph. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, capturing the overall highest participant numbers (film club) and lowest/decreasing trends (table tennis). However, there is a notable inaccuracy in the overview and body paragraphs regarding data interpretation: the student claims that table tennis had the 'lowest number of participants' and decreased dramatically, whereas the visual data actually shows table tennis starting low at 16 in 2000 and rising dramatically to 54 by 2020. Conversely, amateur dramatics is the activity that actually fell dramatically to 6 by 2020. Furthermore, the graph depicts historical data up to 2020, so using predictive language like 'is predicted to rise' for 2020 is inaccurate. Despite these data misinterpretations, the response covers all required data series and makes appropriate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is arranged logically into four paragraphs, following a standard introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the categories. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Meanwhile', and 'by contrast' are used to signal shifts between different activities and time periods. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different sections of the report. However, referencing and progression are sometimes affected by the misinterpretation of data, which slightly disrupts the logical flow of comparisons. Overall, the essay has a coherent structure and is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, including topic-specific terms such as 'participants', 'social centre', and 'activities'. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary and lexical chunks such as 'considerably higher', 'fluctuated slightly', and 'upward path'. However, there are some inaccurate word choices and misreadings of the chart data that impact lexical precision, such as stating that table tennis decreased dramatically when it actually increased significantly. Spelling and word formation are generally accurate, and vocabulary does not impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and participial phrases successfully. Examples of good structures include 'The graph illustrates the data on the number of participants...' and 'Table tennis, by contrast, rose gradually to about 20 participants...'. There are minor punctuation slips, such as missing spaces or incorrect punctuation around parentheses (e.g., 'martial arts(39)'). Grammatical control is reasonably good with only occasional errors, and the majority of simple sentences are error-free, ensuring that the intended meaning is communicated clearly throughout the piece.
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