Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph illustrates the data of participants for distinct activities a single social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the time period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period, while the table tennis experience showed the most significant growth. In contrast, participations of amateur dramatics declined considerably, whereas martial arts and musical performance showed relatively moderate changes.
In 2000, the film club hasd around 64 participants, making it the most popular activity. This figure fell slightly to about 61 in 2010, before rising steadily to approximately 67 in 2020. Martial arts, started at about 36 participants and decreased to 32 in 2005. It then increased to around 38 in 2010, before fluctuating slightly and ending at approximately 37 in 2020.
Table tennis showed the most dramatic increased rising from its participants is 16 in 2000, to 20 in 2005 and remained unchanged in 2010. It increased sharply to 38 in 2015 and reached approximately 55 participants in 2020. By contrast, the amateur dramatics had 36 to 38 participants in 2000 and 2005, but then declined steadily to 7 in 2020. Musical performance, is no participants in 2000 and 2005, it is rose up to 12 in 2010 and continued increasing to 19 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and making relevant comparisons across the categories. The overview correctly identifies the film club as the most popular activity and table tennis as experiencing the most significant growth. Key data points are generally reported accurately, such as the film club starting at around 64 and table tennis rising significantly to approximately 55 in 2020. However, there are minor inaccuracies in some data retrieval, such as stating amateur dramatics had 36 to 38 participants in 2000 (the chart shows around 26). Despite this minor numerical slip, the response clearly presents a well-developed summary of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organised with a clear overall progression. It begins with an appropriate introductory sentence and a clear overview paragraph, followed by detailed body paragraphs grouped by activity trends. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well to guide the reader through the data, such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'before rising steadily'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different aspects of the graph. Referencing and progression are generally clear, though occasional transitional phrasing could be smoother, such as 'Martial arts, started at about...'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate to good range of vocabulary suited for task 1, successfully employing words and phrases such as 'remained the most popular', 'significant growth', 'declined considerably', and 'fluctuating slightly'. Less common lexical items are attempted, including 'dramatic increased' (grammatical error in form) and 'approximately'. There are some word choice and word form errors that occasionally distract, such as 'participations' instead of 'participation' and 'dramatic increased' instead of 'dramatic increase'. However, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the trends clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including participial clauses and time clauses (e.g., 'before rising steadily to approximately 67 in 2020'). However, there are several noticeable grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the text, such as 'the film club hasd around', 'rising from its participants is 16', and 'Musical performance, is no participants'. Punctuation and comma splices also occur, such as 'Musical performance, is no participants in 2000 and 2005, it is rose up...'. These errors occasionally impede smooth reading, placing this submission firmly in the band 6 category.
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